Reviews for This is Ankh Morpork

Reviews For: This is Ankh Morpork

Langwurst 2006-06-07 ch 1,	abuseless on the dosent look good. Add text ankh-Morpork mob wouldn't be silent. Not great not bad keep it up.
Fireflash1 2003-03-29 ch 1,	abuseHi ponder! i love the story so far, its got potential, although the formatting is rather dodgy. on mine i had to double space EVERYTHING to get paragraphs. see ya round xxMorwenxx
Canis Vimes 2003-03-23 ch 1,	abuseHullo Ponder! I'm neither Blue (who I've heard of, but haven't read any stories of. goes off to find some) nor sam, but I've been eagerly anticipating a story from you since you reviewed me. So here's my chance! Enough of my blabbing: A great beginning here! I like the lamost commentator style of it, gives yuo a realistic feeling. It's a great way to open up to a story before focusing in on the characters, if you like. I loved the action! Write an action sequence, you'd be good. The only other thing was what everyone else mentioned, which was the paragraph spacing. I could be being ignorant here, but did you remember to save it as a webpage? Anyway, I'll leave that to you. Please install next chapter soon!
Ponder Stibbons 2003-03-20 ch 1,	abuseThanks fr your reviews guys, there aren't sections missing but some of my paragraph spaces appear to be. It looked bigger with space inbetween. It was meant to be short so as just to get people interested and clamouring for whats going to happen by the time I've got the next chapter written. I probably should've got someone to alpha and beta read it before I posted it. Oh well. I'll rework it and post it again I guess. Thanks again for your reviews.
samvimes 2003-03-20 ch 1,	abuseArgh, Ponder, I've gone blind! The formatting's nuts and sections appear to be missing. I'd call the Librarian. He hates to see words savaged. (this is Not Your Fault; fanfiction.net has evil formatting faeries living in its code). I suppose I ought to find out what the Ienska series is. ::trotting off to Blue's page:: If you repost and/or send me the file in an email (copperbadge@hotmail.com) I'd be happy to coherently review. Requested in the summary! Such an honour :)
Byrdde 2003-03-20 ch 1,	abuseWell, you certainly have me intrigued. I really like your descriptions and the extra witty little comments that make Discworld so much fun to read. You may want to consider a few grammar points though. For example, breaking the first paragraph into several smaller ones, and, as was mentioned, stringing a few of the shorter sentences together. Aside from those few things, which might make it a tad easier on the eyes, you're off to an excellent start. Can't wait to read more. Cheers!
dreamkin 2003-03-20 ch 1,	abusewell i'm afraid i am neither samvimes nor Blue, but i hope i'm not TOO much of a disappointment lol. Right, my review... first off, is this the first installment, or has half of it been cut off in the loading process? it's short, and whilst it's a good intro, not really explanatory enough for my personal prefences. Spacing on 'net fanfics follows a different rule to the rule it would follow for a book, so you need to rethink the spacing to make it easier on the eye, really. Finally, there's a coupla sentences that would be better joined together : A boy and a girl. Who are really in the thick of the mob. is the best example really, as it doesn't flow well. But i guess that's just a shallow point really. Welcome to the world of FanFiction.Net. Hope you settle in well.

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