That was beautiful. Simply beautiful. The only criticism I can make is that you need to make sure you're using your ellipses right. Three to continue a sentence, four to end one.

On that note, I'd like to urge you to check out geo cities .com /rocky_mountain_international . Sans the spaces, of course. They're looking for good writers, and you definitely have the skill set. ;)

Wow...I am speechless...this was...wow...good...I have tears!

DD

This is sheer excellence...I love it,adore it and simply fell for it...This is breathtaking...Just perfect...

omg that was so good!

wow... thats all i can say.. wow.. FANTASTIC STORY. it really got my adrinelin rushing. !!

This is the best story i have ever read. Hands down. You.. oh.. you made death seem like.. like it was better for the world (which it was) and yet.. you made it as though James wasn't ready to go. It's a beautiful story, you should be really proud of it (I know i would be).
I really truely love this story.

... that was very touching... i liked it a lot. so sad but so optimistic for harry! great job :)

Wow. This was a great piece. I really enjoyed the way you used his father's letter/poem to tell your story. I like the poem so much that I think I'm going to add it to my wall.
Thanks. :-)

Wow, that was...I'm speach-less. It's amazingly beautiful You need to keep going, ttyl

WOW! That was very well written and such an original angle to take on Lily and James' last night. The insight into the letter and the connection between james and his father and Harry and James was really interesting!

WOW...is all i can say...just...WOW!!
OH, and i love it...teehee.

Oooh...a father's love. Great job, I love this (and everything else you've written, for that matter)!

RSA

So sad...oh, god...::sniffles, tries to stop crying but can't:: Wonderful job. I wrote one sort of like it, but it was set around a song and it was really terrible and sort of cheesy, and this is just so beautiful. Oh, I loved this. The poem, and the way James's actions mirrored the words - the sadness of his uncomfortable relationship with his father, but the ultimate triumph of good over evil, love over hate... Bravo you.

*sniff sniff* That is SOOOOOOOO sweet n' sad!
(!_!) Excellent story. Keep writing.

Very well written. I loved it.