Great story. That ending stole my breath, I swear.

Well, I like to think neither of them died, and the "a few minutes too late" was because he was drugged and fell asleep/into coma again. That's the best possibility, I guess...

and later they both wake up, marry, have 2 kids and thosa WAFFy things. or not.

What the fuck? No, no! Did she die at the end or what?

Now that's much better, the ending was great. Beautiful writing.

But damnit get rid of that voice! It's like you placed it there just to annoy me! Damnit, it's working lol

I know this was meant to portray a lot of emotion, but frankly i felt that there were too many words used to say too small a thing. Also, Shinji's wallowing in self-pity lasted way too long. I understand what you were getting across, but a simple mistake you made was over detailing it. So far in the story, i really really enjoy reading it because you have both characters in character, and some of the comic relief parts do get me to laugh, but the inner-voice thing i think got a little annoying, mostly because his inner-voice is speaking from outside perspective (We care) and telling him things he doesnt know which just creates a whole paradox. However i enjoy the actual writing itself, i like your style, just change those little bits next time you write and i think youll be great

I sort of twigged on about the dreams being reality a few chapters ago; but it's still been well done; and I look forward to the conclusion.

A very sweet chapter. I didn't think it was too WAFFY; it was done pretty subtely. Also liked the inner monologue Shinji's been having.

Nice characterisation of Touji and Hikari (two of my favourite characters.), and very well written.

A bit short; but still enjoyable; and Misato and Pen Pen's toast was sweet, and I thnk summed up how I feel at the moment.

Pretty good story so far. I like the occasional comments/thoughts from Pen Pen, as they help lighten the mood a bit.

...Wow. That's all I can say. This is the BEST Asuka/Shinji romance I have ever read.

After reading the end, that was the second time, in my ENTIRE life, I have EVER shed a tear from reading something.

Thank you...

This truly was a beautfiful piece of writing.

OMG! that's the ending! aww, ur so crueel! i spend 3 hours straight reading this til 2 o'clock in the morning! IT's an excellent story, but comeon, just give a happy ending plz! Please write a sequal, even if it's like 1 paragraph.

What? That's end? You really cruel person! I can't take this...I need a sequel or i'll die... I know, that's...err...foolish(?), but i need a nice happy end...Write a sequel, please...I begs you!

wow, that is SUCH a good story O_O

this story is awesome but i have to cut in in 1 detail

you would never and i mean never say "mahlzeit" in a restaurant it's something said when you eat with famaly or friends :D

Schwartzwälderkirschtorte:

cake with choclat cream and cherries

Excellent story. It was awesome the way the dreams were twisted up i almost got confused what was real. The ending was good too and i really think you did a good job at expressing everyone's emotions