You need to watch your tenses: sometimes you slip into present tense without noticing, and it doesn't sit so well.

Other than that, good!

great story!! once again, i found a bunch of spelling/punctuation errors, but it's okay. thanks for writing!

I loved your story...can't wait til you write another!

I love your ending. Plus I enjoy stories about thieves - what makes you decide to focus on them?

i don't really like daniel. he's not very charming, and he's a stalker. i like noah, even if he is annoying...

aw! that was soo good!! lol..this is like two years after you finished the story but i was just going through my old reviews..
sorry...just wanted to tell you i really enjoyed reading this..

Awsome i can't wait for another one. I just love your writing and nice profile page I had a cupple of good laughs there. Thanks so much for keepen me entertaind clair_a_net
P.S. Don't know if you still need the names but I have a list my friend and I made for the book were writing its nowhere near finished but we have the plot line down so that is good. Here are those names: Random Character Names
boy
· Raul
· Vespian
· Adrian
· Terrence
· Ayden
· Haden
· Laerg
· Iohan
· Pieter
· Alyen
· Agel

girl
· Maia- mother
· Celia- heavenly
· Vivian- full of life
· Sylvia- of the forest
· Marina- of the sea
· Aurora- dawn
· Neva- snow
· Leila- dark as night
· Ena- fire
Zaida- good fortune

wonderful story! i absoballylutely loved it!
~Kara

yet another great story!! i love it!! only problem is it ended!! *scowls at author* it should have gone on forever.. seriously, it was that good.. and that's saying something because i don't often like sequels casue they seem to drag on so much and be kinda plotless.. but i DO want a sequel for this story! pretty please!! so yeah, congradulations on the great story.

so far i have loved every fanfiction that u have written this one was so good now i'm going to read the one i haven't read yet so...

I said I would read your other stories and review them too and I did. I was surprised when I went to your Bio to check out your other stories to find out you were only 15, I just turned 16 in September and wish I hope my stories will turn out that well. This was another great story! I really like how it turned out, it had a great ending. I'll read you other story too. Maybe not right now but probably tomarrow. I hope it is as good as this one and the first one I read. I am alomost positive it is. Well I have to go now. Bye and good luck on the NaNoWriMo novel, I went to the sight and it looked great, I'll probably enter next year.

WOW! AWSOME ITOTALY LOVED IT IT WAS ONE OF THE BEST STORYS I'VE EVER READ.WELL DONE.

hi...i luiv ur writing...r u sure u aint secretly a professional full-time writer, on this site just for the fun of it?

Sweet!

Aw...sweet. I still don't see why the theives couldn't just be happy for Rovin. They're so selfish! But anyway, I like the chapter.