*laughs Insanely* I love it! as soon as your finished with 'reward' you have to write more! their so much like their parents yet they have thier own thing going on! And I love Xellos's kid! He's sooo cool! So much like his dad too! But I wanna know who the mother is if he's only half mazoku! Was it Filia? Or maybe some other charater! *looks around suspiciously* hmmm...More soon please!

Well dammit finish Slayers Reward because I'm waiting on that too! I wanna see more of both! I enjoyed this very much because I always wonder what would happen if they had kids…

(Scratches head and laughs nervously.) Oops. Sorry about that. Description is one of my weak points in writing. I've made the changes Zelas noted. If there are any other unclear parts, let me know at and I'll fix them too.

I realize you had to do that in the beginning, but it's a bit confusing, for example, when Zoam is casting a sheild (?) because you don't say what he's doing and i thought HE was casting the dragon slave, which didn't make any sense. No da?

It's sort of confusing...but once you read the information in the Author's notes, it makes perfect sense. Well-written, great story. _

I guess part of what I wanted to convey was lost to at least some of the readers. The point of not describing the people talking in the first part was to make you think they were Lina, Gourry, Amelia, and Xellos. I'm not sure how to describe them more without giving away who they really are.

This will be an awsome fic, though it would be better if you described who was speaking a bit better. Other then that, you've got a winner!

YAY! MORE!

cute and humorous..._

The plot's pretty good, although I think you could put some more description into it. Maybe a little less dialogue, or just put more action and/or description between the words.