That was excellent. I never really like Callista...

wow you really don't like callista! me either! :) hehehe. i love it! keep up the good work!

big ouch. very big ouch. i think that anikin should go into a perfession of telling futures. he's very good at it.

I like Callista deserved what she got

Ya know...i kinda feel sorry for Callista *sniff* but otherwise this was pretty good maybe a little unStarWarsy not enough blasters and stuff but probubly better than anything i could have done...:)

SEQUEL! I DEMAND A SEQUEL! NOW! You get, the first ever, 10! Be proud, Author of the Week!

Good, but I think that animal should have been a veloceraptor.

HAHA* cant stop laughing * thankyou! i bow to the master..thankyou so very much you should imortalized in stone... youve killed the evil one. ive been waiting for this fic for a long time. and i enjoyed every word of it. especially the words describing the body snatchers death..hehehe again i thank you:)

Well, all i can say about this story is that it is terrific. Well written and done. Very imaginative. Although mystery is left as to the disappearance and sudden reappearance of callista, enough detail is left for speculation. I enjoyed this story. I liked how she died at the end. Death of a traitor and heart breaker got what she deserved. Well done.

now this was a great story... the way you expressed mara's "fear/joy" of finding out if she was pregnant was just beautiful. and her fear and misstrust of callistia was the perfect reation. I most enjoied how you made Luke search in mara's body through the force to find out if hes a daddy.Great great job.. I love Mara and Luke! and you get a bonus "Great job " for killing callistia! wooowhooo! :D

Being a Callista fan who has come to terms with Luke's relationship with Mara, I liked the whole story except for the last part. I can understand how, in desperation, Callista might lie and claim to have borne Luke's son. However, I don't think Luke has enough of a heart for revenge that he wouldn't have at least tried to save Callista's life at the end. After all, Luke did have a hand in turning Anakin Skywalker back to the light side after Darth Vader issued the command that killed his Uncle Owen and Aunt Beru. Just my humble opinion.

Even though I dislike CallistaLuke together, I thought the ending of this was pretty nasty. i half expected for Luke to come save her but he didn't. Otherwise, this love story was really great.

It might come as a surprise to you, but it IS possible to read a story and judge it for its literary merits-not based on how it lines up with one's personal views. I like Callista, and I enjoy giving the finger to the status quo wherever possible. So I don't mind being a Callista person in a Mara world, and my self confidence is not going to be rattled by a story where Callista dies. Your writing style is good, your dialogue was good, the moments between Luke and Mara were tender and real. Obviously you care deeply about them as a couple, you feel they belong together, and you view Callista as (at best) an unwanted interloper. That's fine. However, I think your hatred of Callista and your great sympathy for Mara seeped into the story so much that you shot yourself in the foot. One thing I strongly believe is that characters-original or otherwise-must be respected. They can go just about anywhere and do just about anything as long as they stay true to their essential natures. In your eagerness to make Callista a villain, you present her as a liar. When, in any of the books, was she anything less than forthright in her dealings with Luke? Even when she left him, she let him know why and she told him upfront not to go looking for her. In your eagerness to create sympathy for Mara, you've made her far more insecure and weak than I'd ever expect from Mara Jade. And in your desire to see Callista die, you turn your back on Luke's essential nature-to help people whenever and wherever possible. (As a few other reviewers have already touched on.) I want to stress that, in making those observations, it's irrelevant whether I like Callista or not. Obvious wish-fulfillment tends to weaken a story. (Just read any story with a "Mary Sue.") If you think Callista should be a villain, go for it! But like it or not, her essential nature is heroic, so it's going to take some honest character study to turn her strengths into weaknesses...and more importantly, show WHY she changed. Jealousy over Mara and yearning for Luke will not cut it. Challenging? Yes, but take the challenge! This was obviously a fun little wish-fulfillment story for you, but you're a good enough writer that you owe it to yourself to do better. Okay, sermon over.

Yet another bad fanfic where Callie make a come-back only to end in Luke or Mara's lightsaber (or both). Next time, get a real plot, not a recicled-to-death excuse for it. I've just have about enough of bad anti-callie fanfic. I wouldn't mind as much if more effort had been put on the writing.