i love the rewrite so far i hope to see more chapters in the near future!

Exelent! I love this story, hurry with the updates _
DEATH TO THE MOON B1TCH!1!

Very good chapter.

IT IS GREAT CHAPTER!

Not bad. You can tell that English isn't your first language, but it's still much better than some of the English authors here at . :)
This is a very good rewrite. Please keep up the good work.

This new version is really getting interesting. Both the story and the language have improved a lot and there are only a few remaining minor errors...

Most excellent!

Waiting for the next part,

J

Great story

gee...make sure to ignore people who make one liners or else have your ego explode and make a crap fic that will get flamers instead.

I see that fic fanfic has some detail...maybe enough to enterain the mind of the above average reader.

I don't mean to say to put so much detail into every little crumb or something, but just a little bit more to intrest some more people.

I think some people don't know about Infinity's Shore and might go there to flame it and insult the writer that made that series. only a possitility mind you as that might not happen. it could, but who knows. make sure to add a link on the fanfic saying something about Infinity's Shore and such. it will make some people understand your fanfic a bit as well also help out stopping some other things I won't mention as you'll find out soon enough.

I hope you get around to writeing some new stuff for this story. Im looking forward to reading more.

GREAT chapters, need more soon (I hope).

Both this and the old version of the story are with their good points. However I feel that the shortness of the current series does not do justice to the beginning made by mr Barnhill.

Very good story. I am looking forward to chapter 2.

Great rewrite. Language, plot and text has come together into the beginning of a good story.

I personally think you should have waited until you had more chapters to post this, like it is now I can't decide if I hate it or like it.

GREAT!

I am looking forward to the next chapter (I hope soon)