I loved this story..and I know this is a few years late and all...and since you haven't written anything since 2003 I doubt you'll ever read this but I think it is very well written and funny in a way. And a nice story to read. So too bad you don't write anymore.

Very very good story. Very much in tune with the characters. It accentuates the little dance those two do around each other. Very cute:)

Great story mo0n! The first chapter worked really well as a standalone - I could totally see it happen! I love what you added too, though, and now I wish you would continue :)

aewsome mo0n! continuation? yes!

Sigh. I'm so impressed. The last line? All I could think was, "Damn, you're good."

Wow... that ending was fantastic, much like the rest of this story! The format you wrote it in, with the one sentence paragraphs (for lack of a better thing to call them), was very cool and very powerful. I can't wait to read more of your stories!

ooh, *killer* ending!

M-O-R-E!

Clever ending! Not so clever Grissom. I can just picture him not "getting" that Sara was talking about him. Very nice job!

It's not seriously to an end, is it...? :( Nice work!

Bravo. Such a killer last line, (and all the lines in between). Loved this story! Please write more.

I'm so glad you continued. Please go on with more. It's honest and painful. Great job.

More!

Gah! You GUESS you could continue this? You guess? You MUST! I insist. AWESOME WORK!

Tell me more!

This is very good. Continue it, sure, but it's also perfect where you've left it. The mood of this is very good, very real. Nicely done!