This story was absolutely amazing. You made me want to cry at times, you always touched my heart. I was surprised at the ending, I wasn't expecting a happy ending like that truth be told! It made me very happy. Thanks for the wonderful story!

have you ever seen the ghost and mrs muir i think either you based this off of it or that you would like it lol anyways i loved your story thanks for writing it

This is going to sound very strange, but as i read this story, i felt as if it was a series of images. The first few were low in contrast, dim and melancholy. As the story went on, things began brightening up, color was much more vivid. It was an original tale and very enjoyable. I hope you write more in the future.

i loved it:D completely envious. tho i believe the previous chapter? was a tad bit confusing. and everything just developed too fast without much showing or happening. but it was a nice read. great ideas and conjectures.

Well. Pithy, but I'm still crying at the end. Well written.

I like this history! I would like to ask of the permission to its transfer. From English on the Russian. Fan-fic the remarkable!

Both it is ridiculous, and it is sad... Very charmingly and organically.

I normally don't read Ghost!Snape, but this was well worth it. What a satisfying ending.

I also LOVED how you portrayed Harry...absolutely unique. He was quirky, adorable, powerful, and pathetic all at the same time. Wow. What an accomplishment!

This story was fantastic!

Marble Meadow

Scatteredlogic said this was one of her favorite stories so here I am. I love the idea of Snape arguing with the angels. Perfect.

I don't know whether you still get reviews for this story, so long after posting its final chapter, but it was referred to and linked on the SSHG Gift Exchange, and I followed the link (as I suspect others will), and I enjoyed it tremendously. It's a bit dark, but the overall tone and plot, and particularly Hermione's rather eerie relationship with Harry and Ginny, are all very nicely thought out and presented. Thank you for writing and posting it, so many years ago.

love it

it was a good story but it had an odd ending... thanks!

Aww...that was an adorable end. Perhaps a bit rushed, but a fitting end.

What a strange, interesting little story. I still say that Snape's right and Hermione would do better with a live lover, but we can't have everything, can we? ;)

I really liked your version of Harry, though Ron was a conspicuous absence. Hermione does seem very needy in this story; and there is a sort of hint of wish-fulfillment in the thought of a lover/lifelong friend who literally *cannot* leave.

Still, good thought and interestingly executed. :)

-K

You have a handful of spectacular lines here.

The first of these is Hermione thinking about Severus and how, despite his faults, she couldn't be more fond of him. The follow-up speculation on her sanity was the perfect, jarring end to an already slightly jarring statement.

Similarly, the line "the shock was worth everything" is fabulous.

Finally - wow! Your Harry is beautiful and perfect and everything I could have dreamed. He is just what I would have suspected he'd become if he ever came into his own - if I'd bothered to think it out. It's all in his role models: Arthur Weasley and Albus Dumbledore, with a splash of pure Harry Potter dislike for fame and attention/stubborn good sense thrown in.

The only real jarring note here is the same as the previous chapter - you slip very occasionally into omnicient POV, and always for two or three lines before snapping back to solely Hermione's or Severus's POV. You did with Crookshanks here - again, an unnecessary three lines that could quite easily be cut - and it's very disconcerting. Nowhere else in this chapter, which makes it seem again, like a mistake, as opposed to a strange new technique you're trying out. But in either case... jarring.

-K

Hmm. Okay, so you mentioned that this chapter might end up being a little bit disjointed.

Not so much - except for in two things.

The first is that, while you've limited yourself to Hermione's and Severus's POV up until now, you switched here - in mid-conversation - to Ginny. And then back to Hermione a line or two later - and then back to Ginny again a couple of lines after that. There's no need for Ginny's POV, there; it doesn't convey anything that can't be conveyed later. I understand that you switched briefly to Hermione's boss, earlier, but that was in a different scene from Hermione's thoughts - you weren't switching back and forth between them.

The other thing is harder to fix; it's the parentheses. They're everywhere! There are some places where they're necessary or well-done. For example,

""I'm not being irresponsible," she said softly, earnestly (for Severus had looked away with disgust). "But don't you have to agree that my work is worthwhile? I'm no fighter like Harry is -- and don't you dare try and belittle him, he's one of the most powerful Aurors we've got." (For Severus had begun to sneer.)"

That's a perfect use of them, really humourous in its repetition. I smirked. ;)

A lot of times, though, they show up when commas would be just as appropriate. The pause and change in intonation inherent in parentheses is just too much, probably more de-emphasis than you really want/need. Some sentences have multiple sets of parenthesis, and that is just plain confusing. Even when it isn't, that sort of thing gives the impression of being a run-on sentence (in that you no longer recall what the original thought was by the time you reach the end).