Best quote ever:

"Seifer's captain. Raijin's the other member. Translation: I sincerely hope you're on your A-Game, mother****er, or else you'll be on the outside looking in." - Chaz Mentall

you have a lot of ideas(things) going on in a short 'story' and each are great, the bible the religion

the GF's the diluted phoenix down and soul absorb and i'd love to read more of all of these: so keep going.

I'm slightly confused. You lost me after Zell was talking to those girls about the list they weren't on.

I'm a bit confused, but a cool plot none the less.