This is a very well-written piece of work. I commend your ability to convey the point even with such extravagant detail. I have a couple of issues, however. Though I have only read the first chapter (I wish to critique one chapter at a time), I must say that this character, Crux Caedon, seems most invincible. Two things I find unsettling about this: first, this gives to me, the reader, a feeling that I'm going to be reading of a person with no weaknesses, thus removing any point from the plot, which I know is not the case. And second, it is never actually explained HOW the character avoids such an onslaught. I'm being very picky, yes, but I think if a) you toned down the magnitude of the attack or b) show that this character is NOT as invincible as he seems to be, it would enable a reader like me to continue reading.

Otherwise, I like the way your are able to paint a clear picture in my head. You have great talent in showing the reader exactly what's in your mind.

Wow, really intriguing so far. Got me wondering who that guy was, and what power he has to offer. Perhaps the power that allows him to do those superhuman feats? So far, this is a solid piece of fanfiction, and it actually seems more like original fiction that fanfiction (unless Radam are centrally linked to Solitia). Anyway, keep up the good work! Man, I should have read this one earlier, though.

Ah, interesting, so here is where Radam comes in. I wonder what exact relation those soldiers in Ch. 1 have to Radam. Perhaps they are the first attack squadron, and if they fail, Tekkaman of Solitia do the work? So does Solitia work for Radam Tekkamen, or is it the other way around? Just letting you know the mindset of the reader :) Also, yeah, felt sorry for that child...

They were such a good family, too... it's sad...

Oh yeah, I forgot to mention this in the second chapter review, but that whole nice, nature scene totally being wiped out... man that image keeps sticking in my head... what's even more sad is that stuff like that (destruction of environment) happens all over our planet today (and mostly in places that are not war zones).

Again, great job in the incredibly detailed descriptions on the fight sequences. I'm intrigued by this sword of his; who forged it? How does it know that its edge killed someone? (And thus reduced its aura after the fact). There's just one other question I have now -- is Crux a human being? Or some sort of enhanced human? I ask because a twenty five meter fall (over 75 feet) could seriously injure or kill a normal human (aside from some of the other superhuman things he can do). Hm, I hope I didn't miss any details about him earlier...

Hey... Man, I've been so busy that I haven't had time to read other's fics (let alone write my own). Anyway, I finally got around to reading this first chapter, and man, I've gotta say you have a knack with words, descriptions, and metaphors. The picture you painted was so crisp and clear in my head that I wonder if all readers pictured the events the same way. I think there was one (minor) grammatical error - basically, the usage of numbers as numbers within text, but even that's debatable. Now you've got me interested with this Empire, Crux, his sword, and what kind of force field exactly protected him from obliteration. Also got me interested on what was that mutated being he killed in the beginning... very interesting...

I think you should try to be a little more clearer with it.
This is the first thime i read this first chapter and i doesn't make much sense for me

You have a wonderful writing style; the chapters are easy to read and it's very obvious that you've proofread before you've uploaded your chapters.

I get lost when a story is made up of original characters, but I have to praise the way you've written them into this fic. You've given your characters...character ^_^;;

They have a background, one that is believable and you haven't gone over-the-top with their relationship. Well done, it will be interesting to see how this story develops.