Hm... Talon's a bit OOC and whilst you give yourself a large role, it's good

Hey! It's Fairy Friend again! LOL! Just wanted to tell you that Sugar Kreme Castle is... well, dead. But I do have a new website that you can find on my profile! LOL! Well, just want to let you know I have a new fanfic that I'd love for you to read, so, if you could... I'D BE SO GRATEFUL! LOL! So... yeah! =P Please tell me what you think of it! And I think you should write a Harvest Moon story, if you haven't already! =P TTFN!

i liked it a lot

suggestion: put more description in

what I see is events moving quickly from place to place...he went here,,he went there, etc.
maybe put more waiting and explaining into it, like a "dramatic pause"
anyways, its your fic so u can do what u want when u want...

Hey! It's Fairy Friend! From Sugar Kreme Castle! I just came to tell you how great your story is! I hope you can read mine and review them too!

~*~*Fairy Friend*~*~

P.S. You should write a Harvest Moon fanfic. :P There's not many of them out there, and those are the best types of fanfics. ^^

Hey! You stolle the Jedi and morphing power idea that I gave to Talon on one of his survey fics! I'm not sure if there is, but please notify if there is any missunderstanding here.

Hey, I feel like making a sequel to your challenge ^_^.

(snicker) Nice, random, and amusing! Good job! My only complaint is that you were given a bit too big of a role. The other characters could have been explored a bit more... And I was OOC. But other than that, good stroy!

This fic was great especially the "great.green.globs.of.greasy.grimy.gopher.guts.mutilated.monkey.meat.itty.bitty.birdie.feet." it was hilarious! I couldnt stop laughing very funny!
(dont worry about the not adding fics to tell you the truth I think its contagious! I have it too. ^_^)