Reviews for The Time Has Come

Reviews For: The Time Has Come

Telyn 2004-07-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey Eloria, I finally got around to reviewing. I must say that it is a crime that this story does not have more reviews. The story is beautiful. It is nice to see a first-hand account of the leaving of the elves from a perspective of an original character. Especially a character that is not tied up with the Walkers. Comments: I appreciate that you did not name the character. It makes her observations (And what observations they are!) and experiences universal for the elves. Even so, she is her own character, with some nice characterization. The tone is excellent and the descriptions are incredible: definitely some of your strengths as a writer. I found the brown leaf and the father in the Dead Marshes especially poignant. The mother's necklace is a nice touch as well, however I found the order it was put on somewhat peculiar considering the cloak covers everything but the hands and a part of the face. I see the necklace being put on first. Although as the object she would wish to take with her, I can see how it could work either way. So the tone and descriptions are lovely, and the title is very fitting. A few small things could use some tweaking perhaps if you ever feel like revising, but the story is excellent as it is. I found a few punctuation issues, tense agreements, and a few questionable spelling / WC. Then again some of it is stylistic (like the necklace thing), so whatever. Overall, I touching story, from a unique perspective. I am looking forward to reading the rest of your stuff. -Telyn (told you I leave long reviews)
Sydney 2003-04-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseI love it. Not just saying that. The premise for the story is lovely, and you have a wonderful way with the English language. The only qualm I had was that the 3rd paragraph down sounded too near to quotes from the movie. Besides that though, it was a very nice little story. You should go on with your character and have her on the boat at the gray havens waving goodby to Middle Earth, I'd enjoy reading what you have to say with that context. Thanks for writting this! Cheers
catsncritters 2003-04-06 ch 1,	abuseWow. Just... whoa. That was really moving. Even though I rarely venture from the Potter slash genres (which you're already aware of, lol), I wanted to read this 'cause you mentioned it. Glad I did, too! I really should read LOTR again though, I only have vague ideas of what's going on here... ^^" -Adrienne

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