also show in that fic that max is embarrased by his mom when she looks him naked by mistake]
u would have uderstood wat i want
but dont include anything about sex ,only ordinary fic
i would be dishearted if u wouldn't make
please reply

I loved this story! Its nice to see Max and Takao as grown up. I enjoyed it very much. Im like a slop like Maxie X3.
this goes to my fav list. oh is this the end? If it is great story. If not plz update.

Wow, I guess I've just never really thought about... growing up? I mean, being a beyblader must be really cool for them, but growing up might be TOO boring.. >.<

Loved da fic! ^_^

I just...wow. You are such an excellent author. I adore reading your stuff...so many times you run into authors who simply lack the skill to write, so I find you to be most refreshing. This was a heart-felt, realistic story, and I enjoyed every word of it.

It's kind of sad that I can be so easily brainwashed...I mean, I was trying to stand out AGAINST the norm and NOT support TyMax despite being a full-on lover of KaiRei (and even more, the KaiReiMax triangle of MWAHAHAHA goodness). Then VForce came and started messing with my head by dropping TyMax hints like A-bombs.
...and...then I came across YOUR fanfiction. And now I'm like a recovering Dark!Sailor Mercury from the Live Action Sailor Moon trying to fight against the GOOD BRAINWASHING I am being inflicted. XDD I mean, you're SO devilishly good at this and it makes me feel so DIRTY. Not that I blame you!
...in fact, you're one of the few authors I feel no resentment for being better than I in the fic-writing department (let's IGNORE for the moment that I've yet to write a Beyblade fanfic...). Your kind of writing is the kind that actually inspires me to further in my own fic-writing adventure, rather than just throwing it all away and giving up like other uubergood authors tend to make me feel. That's SPECIAL kind of goodz, man. While I've got Senses in my Favorites right now, by no doubt this story is the one that gave me the greatest of all good feelings, so this one earns the review spot.
Let's just say you've got the characterization down to a T. Even with GROWN UP BladeBreakers, and the two of the least mature in the group. You've set the whole reality well enough to where you've got a couple that's freaking beyond saccharine, but still applying to the Facts O' Life. So it's entirely believable to the point where I'm still envisioning every scene perfectly in my head. And yes, Max must be a teacher. I even imagined what a Grown-Up!Adult!Max would look like, so thank you for gracing my imagination with such good fodder. XD
The handwritten notes thing is also the perfect touch to keeping close a relationship that rarely gets their alone time quota in. Dunno how much of these facts/compliments I'm regurgitating from your past reviewers, but I've got to say it's hands-down THE best there is, was, and ever will be for a Beyblade future fic. I can even deal with the lack of Kyouju/Kai/Rei because it's just so...satisfying in the respect. Though some sequel involving WTF they're doing in their lives would be nice, I've been stalking your profiles and such for a few weeks now and you seem to go through a similar torture to me when it comes to making things their very best. XD
Nonetheless, you cinched the essence of this entire genre. And what more fics should STRIVE to be like. I know that's wishful thinking because much of this fandom lacks a working *BRAIN*, but seeing your stuff in general, especially this story was one of the few things that had me up until 7 AM the next morning giggling in utter DELIGHT. And not screaming at the wrong-ness of Biomerging with NUDIE CHILDREN in Digimon Tamers...
SO THANK YOU~! Shin loves you to bits now. She questions the why, but she just DOES.
(I was also stalking the Redblade forums like you pimped in your FFN profile-[trying to register, but having some problems] and noticed you too picked up on the Dr. K = REI'S EVIL AWOL MOMMY. I have a friend who's got an ingenious fanfic centering that in the works. If you'd like to contact me, I'd sure love to hear your educated feedback...XD Until then.)

Love it. For some reason it comes across as slightly bittersweet rather than just mushy happiness, but I guess that's because it's very realistic? And real life is always slightly sad? Anyway, you've done a lovely job on this, and it's great to read such a well thought out view on what life after the Bladebreakers is like – something that not many writers attempt. Your characterisations of both Max and Takao are gorgeous too ^^ .

*Sighs contently then stands up from her seat in the front row*

...

*Gives a round of applause (*beaming* mind you) and then sits down*

Honestly Akai - as soon as I read this I was grinning and shaking my head while muttering something along the lines of, "Only you Akai, only you...". There is something within you that can make daily life just sparkle with excitment, entertainment, beauty and life. This particular piece is probably one of the most down to earth pieces I have ever encountered in my life as a fanfiction reader, writer, and admirer.

In this piece alone you have captured the essense of our daily life in this day and age. You have captured the human nature of love for most people. There is not a lot of drama, there is no scandals or cheating taking place. You leave that to the soap operas. This, this piece is *real*. And you protray it in one damn good way if I might say so myself.

You are a lovely, lovely, lovely author who really writes the most wonderful, beautiful pieces out there and this just confirms that fact once again. (Was there ever a doubt in our minds? I mean honestly, this _is_ Akai we are talking about!)

So, in short, since I really did seem to ramble (as per usual when it comes to reviewing your works), this is a lovely sequel/second chapter, and I see no flaws in it what-so-ever.

You have a very established couple in this fic and you demonstrate your vast knowledge of both Takao and Max in this piece. I honestly do not think that anyone understands this pairing's dynamics/science/existance quite like you. Hell, I would even say that you run around as though you created this pairing/made to write this pairing.

So, before I really lose track of it all, I just want to tell you that I love what you have done with this and you have left me in a glorious happy bubble for the rest of the week.

You're lovely, you know that? *Hugs*

Talk to you soon,
Ish.

why so short? why must I suffer the pain of waiting so long? Uh That's it.

I want to ask two things of you.

1) Can I carry your child?

if not, then

2) Can I mug and strip you of your talent inside a dark alley, only to get called a molester and an international terrorist and end up bombing Broadway?

If neither, then I'll just comment.

Seriously, this seems like a towering piece of banality. That doesn't mean it sucks though. You've managed to banalize Takao and Max's relationship so much, there's no magic, there's no passion, there's just the cold hard facts that the both of them have to go to work every freaking morning, they have to deal with each other, household chores, and barious other things which I would call a calm and boring life.

Fortunately, this is not boring, nor is it anything calm. You move us from piece to piece as far as we can go in one sense, and then, a quick U-turn throws us off the track, and ends up giving us a headache as we don't understand anything of what's going on, but we don't care since it's so good.

And that didn't make sense. Woobles.

I like the banality aspect of it, as it simply renders normal a relationship between two males, which is something I can only support.

A message to all of you fangirls. It's not all passion and giggles when two males love each other, I know from experience which I would rather not have had.

However, we can clearly see that life as a couple has not changed them at all. Takao still is a bit overexcited, while Max is calm and happy. Of course, when he was younger, he was more energetic, but it was mostly young energy, and not because he was an energetic type of person. Takao's sunglasses, in the first part, is a clear example of that fact as sunglasses, if I recall correctly, are a symbol of hidden things and a rather wild person.

The rest of the fic is standard Akai stuff. Long and lengthy descriptions which should be the norm in fanfics, and then some. I have nothing to comment on the rest as the others can praise you more than I do, and probably will.

You're on the right track.

*sighs* This chapter grows on me more each time I read it. Besides the obvious benefit of the absolutely gorgeous fluffiness, I adore your characterisation in this - and the first - chapter. You manage to take Takao and Max's traits as seen in the series, mature them by ten years or so, and combine them with a whole lot of life experience, to create completely believable personalities for the both of them (e.g. the way Takao's still obsessed with food, but is so dedicated to his work that not even dinner can completely distract him!).

I love the way you portray Takao through Max's eyes, and especially the fact that he sees and recognises Takao's faults, but loves him all the more despite (or perhaps because of) them. The differences between the tone of the two chapters make a very clear distinction between the personalities of the characters narrating, and I don't think I need to tell you yet again that I LOVE your Max! He's an incredibly human character, with plenty of failings and plenty of good points, and you write him so well.

In general I just love the flow of this whole piece. It's a really sweet snapshot of their relationship, and the ending is just gorgeous! That bit at the end:

"...to anyone watching or listening I'll be chatting with a friend. Which is actually pretty accurate."

That just makes me smile and sigh contentedly like the big sappy fangirl I am, and it's all your fault! ^__~ An absolutely lovely chapter!

*sniff* *wipes at nostalgic tears* So sweet, but somehow, it almot feels like a "goodbye", if you understand what I mean. It wouldn't surprise me much, though will remain just as unpleasant, if in the next chapter one of the two died and all this was just a commemoration to the wonderful person he once was. Sad, in way.

But I do love the sap, so pleasant and *real*, not like the typical cuddles and kisses and what have you. Gives you a sense of this fic actually happening, down the street, to somebody you probably passed on the street rather than a fictional character. Shows you that love isn't about the sex or the passion, but really about the quiet moments and such.

*wipes at another tear* I dun even know why this fic makes me sad (in a good way). *Shrugs* I guess it's the whole "we used to be.." feel.

Lovely story, Akai-san, write more, won't you?

-Di

Hey, you made a second chapter! And let me tell you it's just as good as the first.

You know, Max is in my opinion the most difficult BeyBlade character to portray, he's always acting so cheerfull and happy, but there's a lot more to him than just the tipical happy-go-lucky in a sugar-high cartoon character, but you did a very good job.

However, not only that but also all those little details here and there are what make this such a good story.

I would say so much more, but I gotta go, please keep writting, cause you're a very talented writter, and is always a gift to read your work, keep writting! ^-^

"-just because I'm conscious doesn't mean I could hold a conversation."

So much fluff! Great job!

All of the POV stuff was very well done. It was certainly very Takao-ish to say things like "I know, I know, I'm not a morning person" and "I swear he has the sweetest tooth ever!" -Very cute thought, by the way.

So, all in all, another writing victory for Akai!

You had my attention from the first sentence! I rarely due logged in reviews but I felt this fic deserved a logged in review. For starters you did a great job showing what it's like for two guys to share an apartment and you did an even better job keeping the two of them in character parts of it where a little fast for me and left me slightly confused and you perhaps could have done a better job desrcibing a few things but who am I to talk! All in all though I really enjoyed it and I'm beating myself up for not reading and reviewing this sooner. Anyway keep on writing and I'll keep on reading and reviewing! =)

~Rae~

Megumi: Aww! That was great! That made me smile and laugh many a time.
Neph: You have the ability to say very little but really get your point across. Great work!