I hope that you will finish this story. Thanks for writing

hey D,
Are you oging to finish this story? Its really good

O...more pretty please por favor?

Not to nitpick but SierraWindfire is only half right. Jarod actually worked with both the profiles: Samantha in the episode with the kidnapped boy, and Rachel in the one with the death of the agent who helped Jarod after his escape. And I got the chase scene...I think. It's not clear at first that Rachel is the one seeing it first. If you were to make a slight revision, maybe hint at that fact more toward the beginning.

I think you should continue with this story. I like how it's playing out.

Hi D. Destiny,
I read all four chapters in on sitting, sorry for not reviewing each individually. Your story is very good, and you capture the emotions of the characters very well. Hope you continue your story, it's very intriguing. Hope to read more of your work. Good Job!
M.

I really like the story. Please update soon, so I can read what happens next.

Good chapter overall. The part where you wrote the rachel/deanna joining (for lack of a better word) was terribly confusing and made virtually no sense whatsoever. You could tell some girl was being chased but only at the end. It was not put together very well.

And since you're prefacing that Jarod knew the profiler you might want to have the right profiler. The one he knew was Samantha. Not Rachel. Besides the whole show went to hell when Rachel joined and Samantha left. Maybe you shoul use Samantha. She's a much cooler character than Rachel anyway.

Maybe that's what you intended I don't know.

I hope that you don't get discouraged by what I have written. I hope that you do continue soon. I am looking forward to reading more.

I love this story! Please update soon!!

Wow! The image must be something if it causes PARKER of all people to bite back a gag reflex! Question is, who is it, and what is it that made Parker nervous.

This is a really amazing story so far! I can't wait to see how Rachel and the rest of the cast of Profiler fit in. If english is really not your native language you have a wonderful grasp of it. I'm enjoying this story and can't wait for more!

Great story! Update soon.

This is turning out to be even more interesting than it was initially. Hope you continue soon.

Very interesting. Two people with things to hide, people who can't truly say everything they wanted to. Keep up the good work, and your English is very good.

I am really likin' this! Can't wait to see what happens next!

very good thus far. Your grammer could use polishing, but I appreciate your creativity.

O...intriguing. Love to see where it goes from here.