why can't you finish anything? you're driving me crazy!...umm, i like it.

simply great! update soon!

Oh My God! That's so good! Come on you have got to write of this please! I'll definately be reading!

Good god, what have you done? Ok As much as I love Mole and Alec pain, especially Alec, did you have to go shoot them to the point of no return. And in a twisted sort of way, I loved avery second. *huge evil grin* Love to see whats going to happen next.
Oh and PS, loved your Max/Alec/White Banta at the beginnig.

Wow this keeps getting better! I love that you've brought the other characters into it more, the banter between Alec and Mole brought in a refreshing light side and thier jokes about a book being written about them was hilarious! Are those scenarios really what happens in the story? I'd prefer to read yours then!


(quote) But Ames had a strong sense of duty, regardless of the vast list of negative qualities he toted. He'd always felt responsible for the sibling who had never managed to make the transition from child to adult. In his own awkward way, Ames even had affection for his brother. And so he would stop in to see him from time to time. To check that he was still alive at least. (end quote)


I had to quote that part because I totally agree with that. You didn't make him compassionate towards his brother adn thats good, I couldn't see him being compassionate. But you made him grudgingly care, even if only out of sense of duty.


The ending's scared me, are you going to kill Mole and Alec? I do wish though that there had been more of White in this chapter but I guess the story doesn't revolve all aroud him. And perhaps it would get a bit boring if it did anyway. I'ts good to have other elements in the story.

Hey, this is nice. I simply love the plot (though I have no idea on what you're saying about the spoilers cause I haven't read the DA book yet).
Are there any budding romances in this fic? Cause I have been checking for a whil and "Breaking Tradition" isn't developing much, not that I mind but I'm hooked to M/W stuff. Hehehe, love it. Continue it, I'll R/R, promise.

My enemy's enemy is my friend. This starts out intense. I like the way you played on the honour thing here. I always believed White had some honor in his soul whether his beliefs were skewed or not. You're using that honour here. I like it.

He also pushed Max to the edge in his grip there. This is shaping up to be a good story here. Looking forward to more of this...

Awesome! You really captured White so well in this story. Sure he never showed this much depth on the show but he was just put there to be the bad guy and not have much more depth than that. At least in fan fiction you can make him something much more, and so believably too!

I can imagine he would be reacting just like this. Hope you update soon and I don't mind if you have spoilers in it:D

I'm really courious how this story continues please go on