Hi Chibizoo can you please tell me who the ebony haired woman was (ie- Kaiba's girlfriend) was it Isis? And why is he screwed for life?

NICE!
i liked that too.
are you psychologyst or what? You kinda freak me out.
you could write a book, only *about* the two stories i read till now.

*blinking widely* Nyu... now you're starting to do what Nek0-chan does so well... you're writing exactly what I think in a new light...
Well, where to begin... I love the way you wrote a meaning that can be contemplated into the fic, and the actual content itself was great. It was - again - very well written, and kept me held from start to finish.
*ponders* I do (again) argue with your end statement though. No, you mustn't ~rely~ on others to change anything... but sometimes you need them to help you start *nods and points* Shattered Path - my own personal account on that subject.
*blinks* So there you have it - you've gotten the muse going again, which can only be a good thing since he isn't hurling abuse! Great ficlet - I'm off to read another!

Wow...that was awesome. Especially the way you used the various characters. Although I'll admit, the only ones I could figure out were sloth, vanity, lust and pride. (And I had to look up "sloth" -_-U)

Excellent, that is all I have to voice on this. ^_^

XP Your EEvee muse needs to start liking you better...>.>; Another wonderful story, Chibizoo-sama! ^_^ Go athiesm...or however that's spelt...XX;

I can actually picture that... The sins you chose for the characters actually fit very well(which isn't surprising as you're the writer). I'm not very sure what Jounouchi's sin was..., or why Yuugi was being hypnotized on the side for that matter. How or why did the person suggest the bible for Yuugi? Your fics are like faded reality, sorta blending with many other ideas..., very confusing. I had to read it extremely carefully to understand it. But, then again, that's whats so great about your fics.

I like this fic.

The Bible is a load of crap. There is no God.


Ayod Botla

Throughout this fiction there was a lot of awkward sentence stuctures and some grammar mistakes that more than likely contributed to that. On a whole the story did not flow as well as I would have liked or hoped but the concept was very interesting. The ideas you presented were good and seemed to be well thought out.

The summary seemed to mislead as I couldn't line up the seven sins in this story with what you had written down. The author's note at the bottom helped explain things, though when writing a story one should have the story explain for them.

On a whole this was a very interesting idea and I am glad you presented it. You still need to work on your sentence structure and the flow of your work but you have some wonderful ideas that are being shown. Keep writing and keep up the good work.

Hana

Burning: very good so plz update soon as soon as you can plz

Seven deadly sins. Sounds provocative!! Your one shots are so interesting to read. ^_^

I dun get it, but it seems pretty cool

Wonderfully written, Zoo. ^^ I see the two weeks off in Europe did quite a bit of good. I don't quite see the connection with the Bible, but it is a good stand-alone story, with or without a theme. It has more of a vignette flavour.
After much perusing around fanfiction.net, I've noticed authors with multiple stories repeatedly write certain themes in a certain mood. I've noticed that about your own writing as well. You tend to go for futuristic themes blended with fantasy and hint of classic horror (vampires ^^). I also noticed that you like to write in a certain flavour; sort of melancholy, ironic and pained. I like it. I just hope it's not the distillation of your feelings.

PS - You'll be happy to know that I've actually got off my lazy butt and started writing a story for your contest. ^^ I don't know if I'll ever finish it, but at least it's started.

::Sam thoroughly enjoys reading the fic::
::Then she goes back and tries to match up the sins with the characters. She gets as far as tentatively labelling Mai & Anzu with vanity, before she is strapped into a straightjacket::
::the possibility occurs to her that the sins could just be respectively matched with the characters in the order they're presented, but it couldn't be that simple...::
Heh. Heheh. ^_^;
Loved the last sentence of Pegasus's part, by the way. ^_^ Bonus points indeed...

~Sam

i liked it! It was very well written!
bye