This could be interesting... If you haven't already decided to drop it, you should continue...

This is a very good story...prolouge...whatever you would call it. You should most definitly continue...it's probally too late for that though, huh? If you have not already given up this story you should update it. All the cool stories like this have been discontinued. I hope this one won't be as well. This is a great idea and so far as I know, it's original. So if you have anymore of this story written, put it up. Anyway, good luck, whatever you choose.

~Twilight Canel

I really really like this! Great exposition. Has a promising start.

Update... please?

Well? Are you gonna update or not? It's a good start.

This sounds very interesting! I hope you continue soon. :)