Wha!? I finally get around to reading this and find a terrible cliffhanger! No real criticism, but I'm looking forward to more! What will happen with the triforce of power set free like this? Yikes!

Aw, Navi's departure and the fact that Zelda is not going to remember a thing about Link were so sad. I can't imagine being ten years old again. Welp, awesome job on this chapter! :)

Ooh that's good!! Keep it up!!

Woh, this was one heck of a prologue. You set the background up for the story quite nicely. The dialogue between the characters was very well-written. Welp, I'll read more later! ^_^

I got to read this during third period yesterday due to my computer science teacher's frustrations with a computer program he was trying to install in all of the computers...so yay for the free day that resulted from this, lol. I just didn't get a chance to review until tonight because the lunch bell was about to ring. o.o;

Anyways, that was an awesome chapter. It's pretty gruesome when people get their hands cut off. Is Ruhne going to go all Luke Skywalker minus the technology now? lol.

Gosh darnit. I really do like cliffhangers. They always add that necessary element to really draw a reader in, it's just frustrating because I wanna know what happens next! lol. I'll survive 'til the next chapter comes though because it and its good quality, I'm sure, will be well worth the wait. Well, stay awesome! ^.^

Sorry it took me so long to read this. Between college classes and trying to work on my own projects, I don't get to spend a whole lot of time on the 'net anymore.

Anyway, on to the chapter. Great action sequences, for one, and a bit of comic dialogue to break the tension, too. You had several descriptions I liked, starting with one of Ganondorf near the beginning of the chapter.

Since you invited it, I have one bit of criticism, actually the only thing I could think of that was wrong with the chapter. You mention Daphnes Nohansen Hyrule, explicitly calling him the King of Red Lions, as ruling _before_ the current time period, that of 'Ocarina'. But as far as I understood 'Wind Waker', Daphnes was the King reigning at the time Hyrule was drowned, which would have been _after_ 'Ocarina'; about a hundred years, if I'm not mistaken. It's nothing big really, but you may want to think about that a little more. Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong, though.

Like I said, that was the only thing I noticed wrong with the chapter, so let's move on to more good stuff. I like Ruhne, and the bits about Link being older than he appears were pretty amusing. Seriously, how would you react to a ten-year-old talking to you like that? ;) Little stuff like that gives the story more depth, and that's what some stories are lacking.

The fight between Ganondorf and Ruhne was exciting and well described, with a great cliffhanger at the end. I look forward to more.

Wow your story was quite an exciting read! I love reading fanfics that occur after the Ocarina of Time...and your unique storyline, with all those unexpected twists, have caused me to favorite it! Please continue soon!

This chapter is great! I love all the action and can't wait for more. I hope Link and Impa reach them in time. Looks like Triyu really ruined it. Hope that Ganondorf can be defeated this time. :-)

Aww. How sad.

Wow, this is cool!!

Please update soon.

This is an exciting and interesting story so far, and I'll definitely be following this.

I didn't really see anything that needed criticizing, so I'll go right to the good stuff. First, your characterizations are all good, from OCs to established characters, which act just the way they do in the game. Link doesn't really have a personality in the game, but yours acts pretty much the way I would expect him to, so that's good.

I like all the extra detail you put in, from the other kingdoms to the OCs, the royal guard and his son, and other expansions on the game world. It gives the story some depth and realism, filling out the little fictional world some more. Great job on that.

The plot is interesting, definitely intriguing enough to make me want to keep following the story, so I will. Great cliffhanger on this latest chapter, and I look forward to the next one.

I love twists to the Zelda plot line and this story just keeps getting better and better. I'm curious to see where this is going with Ruhne so you have only captivated my interest even more. I loved your description of Rauru, by the way. I don't know why, but it just really stood out to me.

I think my favorite part of this chapter was when you transitioned from the flashback about Link's first encounter with Zelda back to the present. I loved the echo of the words spoken in that other time. It was very nice. And Link's terminology "we three have a party to crash" made me laugh for some reason. Maybe I'm just being weird, but I liked the contrast of the words with how dire the situation was.

I was surprised about the Gerudo warriors present, but I guess there's got to be bloodshed since Ganondorf didn't get his way, lol. I'm eager to see how the upcoming action scene is going to turn out, though I'm sure it'll be great. Anyway, you're doing an awesome job so keep it up! ^.^

Great chapter! I love how Ganondorf didn't receive the Triforce of Power and Ruhne did. Impa breaking through the glass to get to the ceremony with Zelda and Link shortly following her was pretty cool. Looks like Link has to be the hero again except he has a much smaller sword more like a dagger.

Rauru's ceremony with the other Sages was cool. I like how you had it take place on the Arbiter's Grounds from Twilight Princess. Keep up the great work!!

~DanaeMariSkywalker

The Rauru bit made for a nice passage into the bulk of this section. I thought that was quite successful. And Ruhne with the Triforce of Power? I didn’t see that coming at all! The poor king. He’s all bumbling and confused. I look forward to see where you take it from here after such a twist.

Alright, now that was an exciting chapter, and we haven't even gotten to the big action sequence yet. No, I wasn't expecting a new Bearer of Power, but it certainly makes sense. The only reason Ganondorf received the Triforce of Power was because he stole the Triforce, not because he deserved it. While I suppose this is a slight deviation from the implications made in TP, I can hardly fault you for it, since it makes for a compelling twist in the plot. And by now, I'm sure you know I'll never take offense to anything that makes for a good story, especially when I do it myself in my own writing.

Only one critique. When you switch from Raaru's POV to the flashback that runs through Link's head regarding his first meeting with the Princess, it would seem there should have been a transition separator there. Otherwise, it took me a minute to figure out that you were no longer in Raaru's thoughts and now in Link's. Easy fix, but I felt it prudent to point this out to you. Still looking forward to where this one's going.