So...hm.

I liked this very, very much until it changed perspectives. I mean, I know why you changed from Oscar's thoughts to a third-person a few hours later, but it almost weakens the story. I don't know if I should say that or not, because it's really not a weak story at all, but I didn't like the sudden change.

Oscar's voice was so perfect and eerie. That whole first part, I was seriously borderline sick--in a good way. It felt that real. The beginning of this fic might be one of the best characterizations I've ever read--and it's of Oscar! I really loved everything from his point of view; seriously, that may be one of the best examples of voice I've ever read. It's, like, CATCHER IN THE RYE good...

And I think that's why I don't like the second part of the story. If the whole story had been written third-person, it would have been alright, I think, but then the beginning wouldn't have been as spectacular, either. So, hmm. I will say the last sentence was incredible; I really thought, up until that point, that Oscar had gone PHANTOM OF THE OPERA on Jack's a.ss. I guess, in that aspect, it's better that you didn't describe their kiss in Oscar's point of view, because then you would have lost that element of surprise.

So, I say again, hmm. I do like it. And I love the title. And I really, really love Oscar's point of view. And I'm going to leave it at that.

I just wanted to say a few things.

-THIS is how you do second person POV.
-THIS is how you develop a minor character, particularly one who's as one-dimensional as Oscar.
-THIS is how you write a convincing back-story for said character.

I love it. Dark and kinda kooky. I'm sure it'll be in my head the next time I watch the movie and watch Oscar confront Jack.

Wtf is "squick"?

Hmm. It is an interesty pairing. I never would have thought of it. I don't really know what to think of it. I guess it could be possible, the movie doesn't discuss Oscar and Morris very much. Hmm. I'm going to be wondering about this all day now!
It was well written, too.

I was rereading this and I don't think my first review told you exactly how much I liked this. It was so twisted and wow that... I love this. And Jack is really a cocky bastard isn't he? Way to go Oscar for kissing him and putting him in his place. Er, in my mind alot of things went on in that alley, but that's because I'm kinda sick and I love things like that but ok. By the way, I'm kinda stupid and I couldn't tell so, what line was it that made you up the rating? Just curious.

Wow.

This is an amazing fic. Dark and subtle, just the way I like 'em.

I usually like to nitpick in my reviews, but there is truly not a *thing* I would change about this story.

You're a great writer. I can't wait to read more of your work. :)

Ah!

How could I have missed it?! A new fic from 24601! ( Well, I have a few ideas, most involving the fact i haven't been online in forever *but* I have been so eagerly awaiting *anything* you have written)

Ok, review time:

I love unusual fics with a passion, something that hasn't been done, or does it in a new way. This was all that and more. Oscar POV, wonkycrazy!Oscar PoV, Oscar POV nailing Jack's character, the ending (I really thought maybe JAck got stabbed or something and was in a daze due to blood loss :0) )the whole love/hate is a fine line, everything I havent managed to say properly.

In conclusion: I just really enjoy you're work ( It doesn't hurt to keep saying it over and over and over :0) )

o_O Yeah, Jack/Oscar makes sense, in the same way Denton/David makes sense: It's there, but it totally squicks me. *shudders*

Of course, that doesn't stop this from being a totally awesome story. Well written, wonderful grasp of Oscar's voice, interesting take on how Jack got his nickname. Good stuff.

*shudders again, wanders away*

SO GREAT!!

i mean, i hate oscar...but this was really, really good. thank goodness no one messed up Jack's pretty face! hell, he is geourgeous.

Love, Sparker

DUDE!

24, this is AWESOME!

Really.

I'm still creeped out by Oscar, but it's so GOOD!

-shivers-

-reflects back on reading-

Very good!! And that's all I can say.

WOW, I'm eloquent. *rolls eyes* Please forgive me. It's Mush's fault. *Mush nods*

~Mondie~
(who lurves 24601)

You know, I always thought Morris had a thing for Jack. I'm glad that you wrote out this pairing. Morris is definately the most complex of the Delancey brothers and I enjoyed the way you wrote him.

:D WO.

Slash is lovable in all forms.

XD


Stage

...and I thought MY pairing was weird... wowsah! *gives you thin mints* I liked it though... the inner monologue was the best part
=)

That was some very cool inner mind thing. I'm not a very big Oscar fan but hey, very nice.

YUR!

...that was a strange sound...

I loved it though! Wondeeful! *applause and applesauce*