Wonderful prologue. You raise a lot of thought provoking ideas about love. Although you're scorning it, the first paragraph runs beautifully.

It seems like you are going to pace well, I think a lot of people ruin good plot ideas by speeding through them. You set a good start here.

I'm very interested on how you are going to portray Hermione and Draco's characters and their relationship. I can't wait for your story to begin, I love your style and I'm especially intrigued in how it will pan out into writing dialogue and action.

- Orchid x

I think you may have some uploading issues because I noticed a few grammatical errors, things like unneccesscary full stops, missed out capitals and such.

Your story SUCKS!

:P Within the next few days? Didn't you mean years?

I hate you.

Love,
Syco

Dan, I love your writing. Very Poetic. Take your time on updating, don't you? :)
Anyway... Now I just love you even more...
~Randi Lynn~

The truth is Shameless advertising works! It suretently helped that this is enough to intrique me. Keep writing. I desire more!

If the rest of the fic is as great as the prologue, then you've got yourself a reader. That was so poetic and beautiful. (I seem to be using that word a lot) I tend to be honest in my reviews. Here's my honest opinion Bloody brilliant! (In the words of Ron)

The poets declare fiercely in their stanzas and their verse's -- verses

incredible first paragraph. the end yeah right is so unexpected and bitter, its just perfect.

It doesn't even begin with society though; it begins with the parties involved. -- to me the though sounds wrong

k you are starting to use a lot of 'though's

If we can do that, if love can do that, then even a Draco Malfoy and a Hermione Granger can become. romantically. inclined -- you have a lot of these... i'm not sure if you are intentionally doing this or if you meant to have a ... where theres a . bc i had to turn of the autocorrect feature on Word to get my ...'s to stay ...'s when they were uploaded.

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Dan, i liked it a lot! You use all these big words, lol, but its very fluent and flows well. It doesnt sound like you used a thesaurus to try and sound smart. It sounds like you are actually educated. I like that. I also liked how you brought in Hermione and Draco at the end- kind of tying them into the bigger picture.

haha... you know i will never criticize for length... it was FINE... don't worry about making it long.

i'm not sure if i like your title, but i cant think of anything better.

this is kerbi from that fiction net site, if ya didnt know

can you email me or let me know on fiction net when you update? if you dont tell me i won't remember to read it.

keep it up!

~Kerbi

Well, um, damn. That's a pretty crapy word, so I'm sorry, but this is awsome. Amazingly written, just too cool, yada yada-I could go on. I really hope you keep this going, nothing like some HP angst, I guess. Well, I'm really making myself look like a dork now, so I'll shut up and run along now.

Happy writing
-Suzanne

did you catch my habbit of overusing commas? thought so.

Beautifully written! I can already tell this is going to be spectacular! I can't wait for the rest.

Talent. That is what you have.

You've already captured the readers' attention with your brillinat introduction.

I do hope you continue soon.

Nikki

Your writing is really beautiful and eloquent. I can't wait for you to post the first real chapter. =) *waits patiently*

Until then,
Carly

oh wow... that was the most interesting and well written prologue ive ever seen here... or in any story i must say... im excited to read the rest of your story and cant wait until you have a new chapter... this whole chapter is exactly whast i perceived love be but was unable to put it in words... excellent... i'll keep an eye one you and check in later for an update... keep up the good work.