i have an obcession for the relationship between Malfoy Senior and Son. Please continue! Lucius is very realistic!

REALLY REALLY good! i wish i could write ANYTHING this well! keep writing it! hmm...constructive criticism...oh! i know! just a thought, but you might want to run it through a spellcheck before publishing it , the only one that keeps popping up is "tiered" i beleive you mean "tired" LOL! just a thought! because "tiered" is a word i thought i should bring it to your attention.

you are an idiot. you're a good writer, but an idiot. don't try to deny it! you're one of them. you're just wasting you're time when you're flaming me! at the push of a button i can find out where you live, with a phone call i can have someone tracking you for the rest of your life! and besides, you don't know joe ! half the kids at school would LOVE to kill joe , he's annoying as hell!He may be educationaly smart but his stupidity in all other areas makes up for that. He's annoying and anyone who's sat in a room with him for more than a minute wants to kill he has teased me enough to think about killing him.

And now it's 'poor Draco'...:) Write more!

Well, I must say...well done. And also, poor Narci! Stupid Lucius...
I found your page from your sister. She's been advertising you. Hehe.

Good use of decriptive words, and the characters are portrayed well. But reading might be a little easier if the spacing weren't so confusing.

All in all, well done. Just work on your forming, but the content is very good!