ya, the story is good and i like it. but, the tension lorelai senses between them sure aint sexual tension. i love it when tristan and rory banter, and you can practically see the sexual tension, but in your story, its not like that. their banter just seems brutally rude. there's a way to write their bantering to show that they do in fact like each other, but the way you're writing, it seems like they really do hate each other. if thats what you're going for-fine. but if you want it to be that sexual tension and bantering- it jsut aint working.

tho, i still really do like your story and the concept of it.

loved it update soon

Impressed. Good work I liked the twist you added. But I think that Tristan has to get some form of education because I just dont want him to be some bum that doesnt know ** besides how to work a tv.
Also I think that Rory could tutor him or whatever. But I'm just curious to the whole Jess thing is he going to appear?
I would love it if you gave Tristan the girlmore coffee craving and humor. I mean he has to have some sort of influence from them because living with them has had to have some side effect or something like that. Guess I just want him to be all Rory humor and not always so cocky.
Good job though keep it up. Update soon.
Girl number 1

please update! soon!
i'm loving the story - it would be nice if r/d broke up already though to allow for some trory action ;)
great work!

aww that was so cute
more soon :)

and Tristan left to military school and she never saw him again LOL I'm just kidding. That would be so terrible! I LOVE THE STORY! I'm like a HUGE Trory fan, like the biggest! haha :) I hope you write more soon! :) byezerz!

hurry hurry hurry hurry i cant wait for the next chapter cuase it's sog god! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more! more!

I love your story! I hope that you have time to write more soon! It's very good! I love it! :)

hey, Cathy!! i just realized i vaguely remember having read a story pretty much like this. i didn't recognize it before but as i read chap 3 again, i think this is the story that i read. i thought you were stealing someone's idea (sorry!!) since there's someone taking April's story ;< but i saw the URL in ur section for Angelic and well, it turned out this was really ur fic from a long time ago! :D

well, you're good!! do more, it's a great great start and i dunno why u didn't continue writing more stories!


Deeta =)

:sigh: nice!! very nice!! moonlit kiss? just freakin romantic! go update soon ;)

is this gonna be a trory? anyways...i luv it...continue pleez

aww...sad. Continue soon...I love it.

MORE! I love your story, and they need to hook up already -- haha, j/k, take your time, do what you must ... but we all know how things will end, don't we? Yes, yes, good. UPDATE PLEASE, MUST HAVE MORE!

love it!! haha Rory and Tristan get into a fight every time they talk, it's incredibly amusing. Continue ASAP.

Yes -- good. Excellent, in fact ... okay, that was friggin' amazing! I love your story line! MUST HAVE MORE! UPDATE!