I think you've got a really good start to this story. I really like that it's set at a rodeo and there are a lot of possibilities. I think, just slow it down a little. I'd like to read some description and some background. There's a lot of action in this story, which I like, but you skip the stuff in between. I hope yo don't take offense to what I'm saying. Who am I to criticize? I just happen to be the type who likes a lot of immagery in what they read.

-byrdgirl