|Reviews for Keeper Secrets: 4 Allegiances|
| Guest 8/18/11 . chapter 8
I loved your story.
| Numbuh six-sixtysix 5/19/09 . chapter 8
Brilliant story so far! Only one small gripe with it, after your explanation of the vampires' non-aversion to water. In chapter 4, there is a night elf and skelton on guard duty, chatting. Completely ignoring the fact that a skeleton, being in essence a decayed zombie, should have no personality with which to hold a conversation, you state that the skeleton smiles. I would be interested to know how it does this, as a smile is a series of muscular contractions which pulls the flesh around the mouth into a certain position, and a skeleton has neither muscles nor flesh, by dint of being a skeleton. This being my only complaint (now) in an otherwise wonderful work of literary art.
| MissPixel 7/22/05 . chapter 8
I say, you've turned me into a regular yaoi supporter. I like this just as much as 4 Views, and that's saying something.
*noisily waves Tarkasas/Ramasha banner*
| Kamkila1 10/14/04 . chapter 8
Gah, that was a long bit of reading. Just read the whole story in one go. Man my eyes hurt..
Anyway, awesome story. You should write more on this...last updated first of June.
| Vick330 6/11/04 . chapter 8
It's nice to have more backstory on Doryll, as he is becoming more and more important to the story. As usual, I like the way you manage different points of view in a chapter, giving an interesting perspective on what is going on in different parts of the setting. I'm working on a fanart of Kaelay right now, and I'll send it to you probably next week if I can finish it this weekend. In the meantime, I'll be looking forward to more updates.
| Vick330 6/11/04 . chapter 7
Garrett is another character I thought little of at first, and I truly didn't expect so many connections between the characters. I guess I should know better by now that everything in your tale has its importance. I'm beginning to really like Dorryll, he has a simplicity and innocence about him which, coupled to his harsh past, makes him a great character.
| Vick330 6/11/04 . chapter 6
I didn't realize the important role Doryll has in the story, at first I thought things would evolve more around Dimitrius. I wondered about the vampires/water part, but it becomes incresingly clear that Doryll is something special. I salute you on your ability to create and develop so many characters, while keeping each of them unique and well-defined, it is what caught my attention in your first DK fic, and I'm pleased to see that the same care and thought have obviously gone into this one too.
| Vick330 6/11/04 . chapter 5
I apologize for the long delay in R&R, I've been busy at work and working on a webcomic, so i don't come by ffn as often as I used to. On to the fic now, it was with great pleasure that I noticed that 4 new chapters had been added since my last visit. As usual, I am not a yaoi afficionado, but when a relationship is well written such considerations just don't matter, and I've come to like Ramasha & Tarkassas, as they keep on being rich and complex characters.
| Kulatu Ter'Greal 6/10/04 . chapter 8
| Kulatu Ter'Greal 5/4/04 . chapter 7
The plot thickens...
Keep up the good work!
| Kulatu Ter'Greal 4/9/04 . chapter 6
Interesting Development! Decent way of explaining his ability to move into water, hehe... And I wouldn't say I was "extremely" helpful, just pointing out a detail _
This looks good so far, keep it up!
| Arraxis 4/2/04 . chapter 6
Dimitrus would be more suited as a jerk than Tharian. I also like the way you solved the water-walking problem. I wonder if the Keeper who converted Dorryl is a returning character *cough*Mortagui*cough* Also, I am glad that you decided to write up new chapters every month. No more waiting around, ripping hair out of you head :D.
| BelialKK 3/26/04 . chapter 5
Ooh, an update.
I didn't notice, I've been floating on FictionPress recently.
And Tharian should be nice.
Just because, you know, for the heck of it. :-D
And doesn't the water hurt Vampires?
Doryll must be very much in love. ;-)
| Kulatu Ter'Greal 3/2/04 . chapter 5
Great beginning so far.. But uh, I see one problem... At the end of Chapter 5 Doryll waded into the water? But I thought Vampires couldn't cross water? I'm confused...
| Charra Loon 2/12/04 . chapter 4
Oh come on! Where's the rest of it? More, More MORE!