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| yehudi13 2005-05-26 ch 1,  | abuseou that was ... wow creepy and dark and really really good! |
| Mirumoto Ryoga 2005-03-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseI definetly like the take you present on the comming 'war.' The picture presented becomes very disturbing if I dwell on it for a while. My one piece of criticism is that the Free Verse format breaks up the flow in disruptive ways. In the section Go on ahead. Plan for battles. Meanwhile, my little dark hands Will slip into the city and oh there Will be bloodshed in the very streets The first two lines break cleanly as distinct ideas, but the last three seem discordant. |
| Carfiniel 2003-10-25 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is haunting...creepy. And of course, so true. (Says one who has written a series of The War Is Upon Us fics) Best line: "But I am the War" Wow. |
| Stacey 2003-08-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseEEk. That was wonderfully disturbing. |
| Ysabet 2003-05-14 ch 1, | abuse**shiver** I think I'll go hide under the bedcovers for a while now, if you don't mind. |
| wallyflower 2003-05-06 ch 1, | abuseCreepy, of course, with faint e.e.cummings-atmosphere because of the paragraphing, like "it won't/be so clean as all that". Nice ending. |
| The Nightrunners 2003-05-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseI started to read this, and I was three quarters of the way through the author's note before I realized it wasn't Discworld...bit of a departure from the norm for you. But still, very incredible. Nice darkfic, not many people can do it well. Cheers, Jai of the Nightrunners |
| dreamkin 2003-05-02 ch 1, | abusevery dark. |
| Wunderlust 2003-05-01 ch 1, | abuseBecause I just needed my daily dose of being creeped out. Very fun! |