Love the story, great plot and pairings...but what aggravated me when reading was the run on sentences, missing words and horrible grammar. Looks like The Human Spellcheck needs glasses. But update..I must know what happens to Yoyo (I played the game..I know) But you're a plot twister..sooooo...idk.

aww i like this :] ironicly this is like 2005... oh wells xP

awesome! i give it an amazing 9.9 it's just that it needs a part two..._

Hello me and my dear hamburger have returned.I thought you would never write a new chapter I'm so happy!.

Ahahahaha!... You know that kind of sounds like my cooking. Exept not with spaghetti. I love spaghetti too much to ruin it. Oh great! Now I'm going to have to go and eat spaghetti. Look what you've done!

hey you finally updated. thats cool as i really like this story. update again soon

hehe... i never really thought about Corn and Rhyth together. Rhyth's probably the most populare one to pair up. _

Hope you update!

AW! How CUTE! Yoyo's gone AGAIN? Man... he must really love getting into trouble... ur good! UPDATE SOON!

Yo dude!

I am so glad you liked my little reminder. Sorry it took so long to review had a little trouble with the group back here :)

Anyway this fic is coming on brilliantly (Please ask Tallulah if i've spelt that right thank you)

Yoyo's missing? Why? Oh no! Maybe he's jelous because Rhyth got the land, the apartment stuff like that and he didn't get zit! Oh well he'll get over it!

This has really interested me, it also has become even more clear now of why Yoyo and Rhyth has some rivalry between them. And Corn and Rhyth has something going on definately ,)

Please, please, please carry on with this fic it's going great!

And please could you remind me to update my story sometime? I mean i'm writing one i just never post it :) Stupid or what?

Anyway good going kid and i'll see ya 'round!

Lots of Friendship Love

Fire Of Darkness

Wow, a very good plot twist there. It's an original idea, and I like the way that Rhyth thought Corn had been using her. Nice to read some more of the fic, as well!

To Fire Of Darkness: Why thank you. You seem pretty cool yourself.

Yo dude!

You have so many frineds! Tallulah i think your cool, Mai what si it with you and hamburgers kid? *laughs* oh well.

Say i've read you fic, all chapters and so far it is god. I love it! The way you make us think we'er Rhyth, the way you have mixed relationships and hatred and the way the pieces come together liek a jigsaw. At first i though it was mega confsuing, all the twists and turns, the dreams, then all of a sudden POW it hits me. I couldn't believe how stupid i was not to see it before :) Yoyo: I like him, please do not make him into a bad guy, if you wnat Rhyth and him could get into a fight and Rhyth could win, but please no killing or hurting poor Yoyo's feelings. *yoyo- Yeah no hurting me fellin's*

just forget about him he's bein' wicked to other people.

Kid, i like your story so far, carry on, get goin' take you time, make it perfect then perhaps i will steal it. Only jokin kid, i could never steal from a kid. But please, write more, my life and future depends on it. Not reall ybut i just like saying that,

See ya later, possibly in the next chap. :)

Lots of Friendship Love,

Fire Of Darkness

Wow! this is a really good story! I couldn't stop reading it and finished it in the same day! Lucky me! Wel, anyway, Update soon pleeze! I'm working of a JSRF fic but it's not posted yet. When it does come on, R&R pleeze Thanks _!

Nice eerie atmosphere here, and the Corn/Mew stuff was cute. The Vanessa stuff was also quite nicely done. Not bad! (Human spellcheck? Hmm, I like it...)

please say you'll keep this story a romance me and hamburger love romances.if you don't i'll sick crazy dog on you!

this story is getting better and better please update soon i can't keep hamburger occupied with the maury show for long