A great story. Very good.

I'm not sure how I ran into this... xD ... one moment I was skimming through the Baldur's Gate section, next I was on your profile...

Anyway, you have a much more realistic take on these scenes than the superficial characters the movie leaves us with. I'm not one of those who completely hated Episode Two, but it did leave me with this feeling of incomplete... of rushed work.

I particularly enjoyed seeing Padme's thoughts and how she took the responsibility of Anakin's actions on her own shoulders. Well, at least the way I see it... it's a mistake from her part to deal with his problems and it explains some of his behavior later... and hers as well.

Also, the vivid feelings you've attached to the "I killed them all" scene, about the Tusken Raiders, were very well portrayed... unlike the semi-whiny take in the movie. I always thought that to be the perfect sign of Anakin's lack of stability, despite all of his attempts, but they didn't treat it half as seriously as I would have liked. You did.

Good job!

I thoroughly enjoyed this one shot fanfiction! I must admit that when I first watched this movie, I was disappointed by the lack of feeling that the storyline held. Not only that, but also the fact that they portrayed Anakin as a immature and sleazy kid. Good looking, yes. But definitely sleazy.

Anyway, in this lovely fan fiction of yours I found Padema quite amusing as you delved into her thoughts and emotions. Her feelings for Anakin were understandable, and you made what were a few mediocre scenes shine brightly. Your writing was perfect structure wise, and I found the advancement of the story flowing...very easy on the eyes.

So the question, did I like your one shot fanfiction? Absolutely! :)

This was a good expansion of those scenes. I haven't read the novelization, but I assume they don't make an effort to do the same?

One small note, it looks like you are saying Anakin and Padme met on Naboo, but it was obviously Tatooine... unless my mind is playing tricks on me... Correct me if I'm wrong. :)

((“Give me an hour to pack,” he said with a wink and a youthful smile that reminded Padme of the innocent, kind-hearted boy she’d met ten years earlier on Naboo.))

I am still of the extraordinarily firm opinion that Anakin never should have mentioned a single word about slaughtering the entire Tuscan settlement/raider camp/whatever it was. Plain and simple, the entire scene painted Anakin as dangerously unstable, at least to me, but maybe it was just me suffering through all that teen angst that Christensen(and the movie script) brought to the screen. While your rewrite does work better, I think the whole movie would have to be gutted to make the romance work. Of course, considering your extremely low opinion of the movie and the romance, I figure you're of that opinion, too...

If only I could see Hayden and Natalie act these scenes, it would have made Ep II much improved. Good characterizations. Can you do this for the rest of the botched scenes in Ep II? Say, all of them?

Oh, God, thank you so much for writing this. This is how it should be, not George Lucas's infantile Anakin and one-domensional Padme. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Very interesting take! I never considered that Padme would feel somewhat responsible, though it makes sense - she is a little older, and definitely has a caregiver personality. Thanks for posting it.

Excellent job! You should have written the novelization. Salvatore did such a childish job.

Great job! :D