Well written with so much underlying emotion...

Somehow you managed to weave so many undercurrents into the story... Nicely done!

gosh... it's a nice story. It was fun reading that Malfoy has a soft side. You also made the right chose in not exaggerating some scenes.. haha. My heart softened when i read the last chapter with the kitten thing. I almost cried becaude i remembered that there will be no more HP that will be made by Rowling. SAD.

There were some typos but the story was great

Firstly, great story... i really liked the ideas, however there were some editing things i didn't like. Fistly, i absolutely love fluff between harry and ginny or ron and hermione, and this story was filled with both, which was, in my opinion fantastic, however i noticed that you tend to use "squeeze" alot. Now this might have changed, seeing this story was written in 2003, and you might not use "squeeze" anymore (you might not do any of the things i disliked in the story anymore) but i absolutely dispised the "squeezes"... it might just be me, but i seem to find "squeeze" an extremely disturbing and perverted word. now you might have been using "squeeze" as a synonym for "hug", but don't you think "hug" is a much nicer word??

The second issue is the "Enter/Return Key", you know, that key on the computer keybored that makes a new line. you didn't seem to use it much. now i would just like to point out that in novels when a different character speaks the author will write their speach on a different line. this is both easier and more enjoyable to read. Also every now and again there were sentences that lacked commas, i personally love commas, and also you ocasionally mixed your "to,two and too"s and your "your and you're"s.

The last thing i'd like to say is in your last chapter i noticed that when the students were having the party and you were writing about the girls one of the characters was called "Paravarti". I found this rather strange, and in the next sentance her name was "Parvarati", which was also strange, so i kept reading and soonher name was "Parvarti", which was close enough ('cause it's actually spelt "Parvati")... but in the next paragraph it was back to "Parvarati"!

Now please don't just ignore this comment because i put alot of thought into it... i read the whole of your story, which is amazing, your spelling was fine (compared to mine), and i really hope you read this... Comment me back, i'd like to here your opinion... and i am about to read the sequal and see if any of these problems changed... thanks.

-Bella

P.S. N.E.W.T.S. and O.W.L.S. are actually N.E.W.Ts and O.W.Ls (the "s" doesn't stand for anything, it is just describing how there is more than one N.E.W.T [plural])... i did notice you corrected this in a later chapter though.

omg such a great fic!

To the prior reviewer who graciously failed to give any form of a name or e-mail so I could happily explain to them my grevious errors. I suppose I'll have to make due with the review, incase they return.

Your opinion (note I didn't say constructive criticism) was taken into account, and then promptly file away, in a very distance and dark location. - Clearly you missed my polite notation of the term euphemism, located on my user lookup page.

You failed to take notice that this story was started long before the release of Order of the Phoenix, long before Dean Thomas was even mentioned (in connection with Ginny).

Of course the characters are OoC - Vanilla Whispers is my story, and I'm allowed to make them that way. Just like those authors who wish to make Harry and Draco bisexual vampire rock gods. It's their prerogative.

And if Hermione cared so much more about brains than looks, she wouldn't have bothered to dress up at all for the Yule Ball in Goblet of Fire. She's a female, she cares to some degree. She simply doesn't put the daily stock into it as other girls.

Seductive dancing does not equal being a whore. Though, I suppose that if one were as prudish as you appear to be, what with that perpetual stick up your ass and all, then I suppose anything beyond a slight glance across a room would be whorish in nature. -- Get out in the world, take a look around, 16-18 year olds do behave in such a fashion. It isn't evil, it isn't wrong, and blessedly, it isn't up to you to decide.

Next time, when you want to suggest to someone that they "improve their story" - how about you dig a bit deeper instead of jumping to hypocritial conclusions.

Now later in my story, where I have yet to fix my massive writing errors and some holes in the plot, yeah, you have right to make mention of those points there.
But just because you don't like the story, doesn't mean that it needs to be "improved" aka altered, to personally please you.

Know what, don't bother reading further, you'll simply feel the need to bitch more.

If you want serious cannon, go back to the books. But I advise not reading (the abomination otherwise known as) The Half-Blood Prince then, because even JK Rowling decides to take Ginny and Dumbledore on the OoC ride of their lives.

Have a bright and sunshiny day! If you can possibly remove your head from your ass to do so.

You know how OOC Hermione and Ginny are acting?! And how clitche this is as well?!Firstly Hermione would not really want a makeover. She cares more about brains than looks! Also when did they both turn into whores?! You would have to be pretty slutty to dance like that! What are they doing in there anyway?They seem to young for that thing anyway.Niether Hernmione nor Ginny are thereally overly flirty type.Also you never asked for a explimation about Dean. I sugest you improve your story

I just finnished reading both of your stories and I've been checking 2 see if you had any updates and I saw that little note about the delay for Vanilla Dreams and I have to say that I understand w/out a doubt. I just have to say this...OH MY GOD THIS STORY IS SO GOOD!...cries in the background...Please update soon...more crying...

Your faithful fan...bows down to author...
Mike

It was a really good story, but part of the way through the formating got messed up. I see it is like that in the sequil as well. If you fix it I'll read it, the sequil that is.

This is an awesome story1 I'm gonna write a review even if it's done!

I so loved this story... I'm going read the sequel now. You have talent by the way!
Love, Laura xx

this was sweet

great story so far

awesome! That is the best srory i have ever read in my life! omg!i can't even put it in words to describe how much i loved this story! i am going to go read the sequel now... laterz!

okay i bet your getting tired of me, now right? LOL, anyways, really really really good story. the best i've read on here, by far. i'm serious. okay, i want to read the sequel now!! you'll be hearing from me, i'm sure on reviews to that story!! good job on this story, it's really excellent.

wow, that was a really really good chapter!! i like the line about, you mess with one lion, you face the entire roaring pride. that was a really good line. okay, i'm going to finish this story now!!