I know it's been years since you wrote this fic but please, please continue! I super love it! :)

pls update this! plsplsplsplsplsplsplsplspls!

i'm loving the story and its still suspended there!

kitematsu

what? What happend? NO a cliffy, next chapter. HURRY. *chanting* whathappenswhathappens. Great job! Update soon!... Oh, and who's Mia?

It's nice pls continue the good work ahihi_

hey, pls update soon, ive been waiting for the next chap. goodluck with it!

It's REALLY REALLY REALLY great. I just hope there are more chapters to come. Hakkai and Yaone look so wonderful together. Please update soon!

I have not yet read this fanfic. I will once offline ;) . But, I was wondering may you tell me what AU means? Yourself as well as others have it in their summaries. I will posts my comments and your fic later I assure you.

Hey, when'z d next chpter?

I luv H/Y stories!

Just continue, okay? An author should decide the story without hesitation. Be confident, there will always be readers who don't mind your stories. Wow! I suddenly sound like a philosopher! Anyway, I hope this review helps you somehow!

Maa, maa, Hagaki-san. It's true that almost everyone was OOC so maybe u could just change the first chapter a bit. Just so that Kougaiji isn't playing the bad guy role, y'know?

You don't need to change the entire thing. Just tweak it here and there then put in an OOC warning in the summary or something. It's entirely up to u tho. These are only my suggestions.

But, all in all, the story flow was well done. Your descriptions were lovely. Dun worry too much! Everyone has their own opinions. Most important though, is the author's a.k.a you! _ Good luck, Hagaki-san!

I honestly love seeing Hakkai and Yaone together, but if Kougaiji is going to be OOC? Well, almost everyone don't really know how to write about Kougaiji (he's the most person people write that is OOC, don't fret/ bother about it )

um, sorry i forgot to review wen ur first chap came out but, my computer froze, hehe.

too lazy to log in you see...this isnt even my actual acount name

before, i was guna say how kou was so OOC, and how Yaone was as well, like you have mentioned.

YOu see, I a BIG k/y fan, but i dont mind h/y either. My 3 fav. characters...yay

Well, point is, I really cannot predict what is gunna happen, but i suggest adding some tension in the fic, since its basicly plotless to have a fairy-tale like story here.

No offense or any thing, but haha i really LOVE sadistic and angsty stuff with no happy endings.

And about the rewriting, it really depends how you feel about it. If that is the easiest thing to do, do it...if not, don't, cuz i know how hard it is to write a good fic with alot of description.

So...unless you can turn it around in the next chapter...?

Ok, I'm mad coz you didn't continue this Ruby pointed out, the occ-ness is obvious .aND I'm disgusted at Kou's pet name to Yaone.

p/s:Rook is protesting because I haven't update MY H/Y !Gomen, Rook.

Sumimasen, demo please re-write the first chapter. I'm a Kougaiji fan that's why I really don't like it if he's sort of a bad stalker. Same with Yaone. I'm also a Yaone fan so please change her attitude there. I kind of like her as the sweet and gentle type. Arigato gozaimasu.

Sorry to say this...almost every one is OOC. Hakkai, Yaone and Kougaiji. I just can't see Yaone going goo-goo gaga over Hakkai. Lirin may do so, but not Yaone. She just smiles and look away, but won't wear lipstick just for him. If can, change.