I like how descriptive you were. You left room for a sequel so you should do on. I absolutely love this! :)

JENNI! I'm crying!

I don't get it, was he a nothlit or not, why was he morphing out? anyways, that was really good! now write a Marco one!

well it was a good start, you are definantly making me curious of whats to come. the only complaint i have is HOW HORRIBLY SEXIST OF YOU! i mean honestly, the boys play basketball while the girls gossip on the sidelined and "cheer for their guys" the real rachel would never stand for that!

Jenni, when the hell did you write this? And you never told me? ::scoffs:: well now that that's over with, great story Jenni! I LOVED it! Cassie seemed a little like Quan to me, though. for all of those who don't know, she's from the simming. READ IT! anyway. GREAT story Jen, keep up the good work!

Good story. more please!

Nice story, using the "sub-temporarily-grounded" idea from Megamorphs 4... right? it was funny...the part about Ax eating...I feel sorry for Cassie...WRITE MORE

Coolness! That was a pretty good J/C. If I were you, I'd go into that a little further, you know explore the timeline and all that. But that's just me. Anyway,

good job!

Yes! My first fic written on my own! WOOHOO! ::calms down:: Okay Jen, breathe. Well, I edited it, so now the pesky Typo Daemon is out of a job. I'm not quite sure why I wrote a Jake/Cassie, it's never been quite my style, but it seemed to come out okay. So review!

Very good. A few spelling errors. Proofreading would make it even better.

This is good. What exactly was the timeline? I think you should go into that. It's you writing, though. Keep up the good work.

Hey, that was, that was really great! Write more J/C!

Very good. I've thought about the burden of that particular secret as well. I have one tiny change I'd make here: Jake probably wouldn't wait two days to ask Cassie what she knew. Other than that? Pretty close to perfect. Well thought out and well written. Good job.