I am fanfic_undertaker, a member of the Fanfic Undertakers
Elite Force. On behalf of the entire Force, I declare this fic: LAME! LAME!

VIOLATION OF CODE 101 625 709!
GAY AND WEIRD!

LAME!

Oh, and for my adoring fans on the freak forum who don't quite get WHY I say it's wrong to do what you're doing, and ESPECIALLY for that Christian who sadly doesn't even know what's in (her/his??) own Bible, here's a direct quote from the King James Version:
Leviticus 18:22
Thou shalt not lie with mankind, as with womankind:it is ABOMINATION.(end quote)

Oh. Just take a look at that.
(I'll seriously pray for you.)

Look, it's not your fic that bothers me so much. It was the fact that while reading your review, I saw a statement from you saying that you are gay when that 'assasin' (or whatever character he is) asked. Understand??

Oh, boy!!This is great, you've made me the centre of attention on some freak forum!! Congratulations, Salamander!!I do rather like it, you know. It's interesting to find out what you and people who think like you have to say. All in all, I've learnt a whole lot from this experience. And you are about to learn something, too:
Whoever said anything about my being CHRISTIAN?? Of course I'm not a Christian!The average Christian does NOT like to speak/advise against such things, my friend.
I'm not the only one with lots to learn!

Gods, what is with these people? Are they so close-minded that they'll scream and whine at you just because you inserted a bit of Yaoi into your Fanfiction? *rolls eyes* You deserve better, my good friend.

My age means nothing, Salamander. I'm STILL RIGHT!
Anyway, it seems you strongly believe in this bizarre thing some people are doing now.What can I say? Sorry I even bothered you.
I hope one day something or someone will help you out. I know that most people who are gay are like that because something traumatic happened in their past. All the best, hope you get out of it.

I can't believe this. You are a fantastic writer, your writing style is dazzling...BUT HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO NIGIHAYAMI KOHAKU NUSHI? You have such potential!How could you do so much damn crap, man??!Get REAL!Real people are straight!NORMAL people are straight!Ever heard about the garden of Eden??! It was ADAM AND EVE NOT ADAM AND STEVE! YOU NEED TO TURN A NEW LEAF! I'LL PRAY FOR YOU!!

Disgusting story.
That's all I have to say.
Try not to make our dragon boy look like a hentai, u hear??

I am appalled.
I know this is a whole shounen-ai, hentai, yaoi whatever fic but I am still disgusted by how you portray our dragon!
Try and get your mind out of the gutter and if you can't then please choose a LAME anime character to be your victim.

I am appalled.
I know this is a whole shounen-ai, hentai, yaoi whatever fic but I am still disgusted by how you portray our dragon!
Try and get your mind out of the gutter and if you can't then please choose a LAME anime character to be your victim.

Hey, did you know that Yaoi is crap? I mean look at this **! Look at this **! Look at this **! **! **! It looks like it came out of somebody's ** and forced into a computer program! This ** is gay! Die Yaoi and Yaoi fans! Die you **-stranglers! I said die you dancing whores! The very official DRUNKMAGIKOOPA rating for Yaoi is. . . my dog's **!
**! **! **!

You're gay aren't you? I am too. Would you like to come over to my house sometime and-- you know-- have sex?

Let's see. The story is generic and bland, Kii is a total pussfag, you, the author, are a very angry and disturbed individual, which can be seen in your last response to the Assassin23 moron, and Assassin23 himself and "the ** next door" are complete idiots. You're welcome.

oh my...O_O Haku is quite eager...O_O oh my...

pardon, I love your story, even though I'm usually not a shonen ai fan. ^_^ I love how you write. The sentences are just perfect, and everything FLOWS. it's hard to find any piece of literature that actually FLOWS. ^_^ I applaud you! (just like touki yume ^.^)

~meow-chan~

Nice! But, um, don't you think the "gay sex" part should be rated R? And I never knew Haku is gay. Good thinking though, your story made me laugh...can you imagine Haku being gay? Nah...I'll be a laughing stock!

That endings not bad either. Hearing the whole story was cool. I loved the story behind the lady in grey.