Reviews for Your Body is a Wonderland

nimitz4
2003-05-10
ch 1, anon.

abuseHey Jacey
Just read your story and I was just blown away! I'm sad to say that this is the first story of yours that I've read...so in order to rectify that mistake I'm adding you to my favourite authors list!

First things first - I love your style of writing! There was fantastic balance between the song (btw - I loved this song by JM) and the scenes - just a really good structure in the way the story "plays out".

I really liked the descriptive imagery you used in your writing (i.e. "...her chin resting in the palm of her hand, and her hair was falling in a sheet... Covering half of her face." *sigh just lovely) - I'm a visual "thinker" and your descriptions just brought the scenes to life for me. *as Shakespeare would say if he was alive today "me likey likey"* :-)

Most of all I really loved the way you depicted their relationship...I read a lot of stories where there's great smut, great fieryness in couples attraction for each other etc etc (which don't get me wrong as a true fanfic addict I love love love) BUT you created this amazing and very believable deep love/attraction. I know i'm not explaining this very well - but there's a real difference in being able to describe a quick or instant physical attraction, and a deeper, intense, right through your "psychological core" kinda love...and you nailed this one perfectly :-)

Unfortunately I don't get a chance to read fanfic a lot *sniff sob*, so it's very satisfying to read stuff as good as yours...it makes the time I spend on it worthwhile :-)

So...I'm glad to hear that you intend to keep writing...cos you can be sure that I'll keep reading :-)
Thanks again
Nimitz4 aka Sarah

...and when Krit whispered love you kitten in her ear

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