Reviews for Enemies: Chapter Two

Reviews For: Enemies: Chapter Two

Cynthia1850 2008-07-12 ch 1,	abuseMy, what a cliff hanger.
skahducky 2003-05-13 ch 1,	abuseWell, I had my doubts about Katlin but I wasn't expecting that...and I'm also thinking that she might not have done it anymore (I had thought she was guilty when Orion first confronted her with it). Anyways, this is a really good chapter. Please update soon!
FairyTale 2003-05-12 ch 1,	abuseAlright, I can understand that you don't want to endlessly repeat that Orion has a very good reason for what he is doing to Harry in your preview. Having read your stories, I wouldn't have expected anything else. Besides, from the way things are going now I'm fairly convinced that until Family Relations is finally out, I like Orion so much that even if he kidnapped Harry in the dead of the night to deliver him to Voldemort I would not be angry with him. Because - strange but true - I like Orion. Really do, and it's getting better with each chapter. This one especially. Why, you ask? Well, because in this chapter you managed to give Orion a. . . human quality he has been lacking before. Don't get me wrong, he wasn't unbelievable before, but in Partners and in the earlier chapters and from everything I gathered from you always refreshing Q&A sessions, Orion to me seemed to be the tough, straight-forward, hard-working man who is loyal to his friends, an absoulte pain if you get on his bad side, devoted to his work (and extremely good at it) and all in all too. . . stiff. Excuse my lack of better words, English isn't my native language to top it all. And then you had this chapter, and the scene where Katlin sent him the pendant back. I guess that while I've been reading how he was sitting there staring at it, thinking just how wrong he was to accuse her of undermining his mission, I have been grinning my head off. Not because the scene was so extremely funny, it wasn't, but because you (for me) took away his ever-distant, never emotionally involved flawlessness (which I had taken the liberty to read into your description of Orion up to that point), and made him all the more likable to me. I'm also pretty curious as to how Charly will react once he gets to know who the mysterious woman is. I don't think he'll repeat his saying about 'earning second chances' at first. If at all. But if - and let's just say if - Katlin really becomes Orion's wife, you'll have a lot of explaining to do. I hope you're aware of that. Because even if you state that DE-Elites are somewhat different from the average muggle-for-fun-killing DE field worker, I still don't think that somebody who isn't in some way attracted by Voldemort's theory of the inferiority of half- and mudbloods would ever join their ranks. And from what I remember from canon, that was what Voldemort and his DEs were all about - but anyway, I'll take what comes with that story, I'm sure you'll make it right. It's just a hilarious scenario, just imagine that indeed Katlin and Orion marry and have those five kids, but that both keep their 'jobs' if you can call it that. Then they could have dinner-conversations like that. K: Orion Darling, could you fetch the kids from the train station tomorrow, I have a Death Eater meeting to attend. O: No, I told you over a week ago that I have to go working. I've been told yesterday that we'll raid a Death Eater meeting. . . (Both look at each other) "F*!" But then again, they don't talk about their respecitve business now, maybe it would be better to keep that up in the future, should they really marry. So, and now I'll leave you before I start filling the review page with short stories in which I start stealing all your OCs. Until next chapter FairyTale
nessie 2003-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abusegreat job! the computer problem is still going on i think... but at least i can still read stories...well great job anyways! ~nessie~
Silverfox1 2003-05-11 ch 1,	abuseNo, actually I wasn't asking why, I was trying to say it wasn't something you ought to do ... unless you had to much money and didn't know what to do with it. (On that thought: 'Hey, Orion! Over here!') ... As for Sevi: Well, you ought to know me by now. I'm always thinking about Sevi or Draco and you write one great Sevi. ... So Charlie's actually encouraging Orion to continue the relationship? I wonder when he'll be asking to meet the girl ...
UnrepentantReader 2003-05-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseOW!! But, but, but...she...he...and...well. First of all, they do enjoy each other, don't they (: You manage to convey a wealth of feeling very subtly, in every scene. Not just the ones between Katlin and Orion, either, but all of them. You paint a vivid picture (: I couldn't help feeling Orion leaped a bit to conclusions--after all, she's been very honest all along. She may not answer, but she doesn't lie, at least not yet. Soo, since he agrees with me, lol, I guess we'll be seeing more (; OOh, more Charly. And giving advice--oh, dear! I can't wait to find out what's next. gleefully rubs hands Just WAIT 'til he finds out! And obviously, since it's YKW and all, and Charly's a Muggle...it speaks volumes about both men, that they manage in a place as prejudiced as the WW--Orion to bring him in, and Charlie to stay. I love your characters. The more we find out, the more there is to discover. I love the depth, and intricacy. I mean, Katlin, she's a DE--a bad guy...and yet she's got standards. Orion thinks she played him and she sends back the expensive jewelry. You've got to admire her, even if you think DE's are sick. All of them are just so interesting. blink Well, of course she's not a *--I should have been clearer g* my bad. I wasn't insulting her, I really like her (: Katlin is a very strong, sexy woman, who knows what she wants and goes after it...and who doesn't leave people hanging for chapters forever... (; I'm not sure if it's more of a comfort knowing they're written, or a torture (: ELFQUEST! gets a grip I first read Elfquest when I was eight, and I've been hooked ever since. Breathtaking art, fascinating stories and characters. If you ever do decide to, erm...recommend a few good books...particularly ones that have really strong, entertaining characters g...without giving away any secrets, of course. If you got in trouble, we'd never get our fix (: And hey--I'm really sorry to hear about Cypress Gardens. It's always sad when places you love are...I hope that it's only a temporary thing, and that it gets opened again, somehow.
Moriwen 2003-05-10 ch 1,	abuse“You’re an idiot, Black.” He told himself as he wrapped the small pendent back up and dropped it into his desk drawer. “Thinking with every part of your body but your brain.” Great line. Hm... A little too much sex if you ask me, but then again I'm still young, and like classical romance better. Cliffhanger endings drive me nuts, but they always bring me crawling back n my hands and knees when next chapter time comes around. It is terrible about Cyprus Gardens, I also live in Central Florida, and they're developing so much in my area that the acres and acres of cyprus swamps around my house when I first moved here have turned into acres and acres of apartments and housing and strip malls. It's especially sad that a good place like that goes out of buisness while Sea World and Disney are bringing in lots of emmigrants and paying them next to nothing. But I should be discussing the story. Sorry. Ranting. Hm... Even though Katlin hasn't really compromised his situation yet, I think Orion was right to break it off with her. He sure wasn't thinking with his AHEM something besides his brain. Okay, okay, I'm not a romantic. He has five kids? Hmm... It's not hard to see why... Good Chapter. Thanks for sharing it with us. When are you going to do more Sirius stories? (Hah hah I made a pun, yes it was lame) Arania

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