I love this story. It's so deep and well written. The present tense really gives it an extra something special. This is really great. *Applause*

Really good AU ficlet.

Cool.

Awesome. I have no idea how I missed this. Great work!

~DM

I love it! The writing style is amazing and works perfectly, and the AU ending is actually believable. Trin and Neo are in character, and the dialogue is perfect :)

I like this altenate ending! However, you didn't mention Switch or Apoc! Are they already dead?

thats a pretty mad alternate ending. I like it.
Nice style as well.

A friend.

absolutely wonderful! well written, well thought out, and moving. awesome job

Blake! The 2nd person perspective is GORGEOUS. Honestly, all of it is gorgeous, but the 2nd person perspective pushes it right over the edge of "great" into "brilliant." Not only is it different, it makes everything feel so immediate. The fragmented style really works, I don't know if you intended to use it to play with time, but it really made it seem like things slowed down for Trinity as soon as she saw Neo go down. She went from scanning everything quickly to suddenly noticing all of the little details. It was such a human reaction, but poetic at the same time. Incredible, dear.

Amazing. This is just too amazing for words, Blake. Damn.

An alternate universe within the limits of one chapter, where everything is described seamlessly, the flow of narration is perfect, the style is brilliant and the conclusion... agh. The conclusion is simply breathtaking, not to mention how you mixed Trintiy's reasoning with pure faith.

"You believe in him. Beyond reason, beyond logic. You love him."

I love it.

~chord

This was GREAT! The Raven was a good touch I really like that story and just the small glimps of it in this one was wonderful. (What about guns? Why) I love that line. Alot of people give Neo guns and I really don't know why.

Blake, you're my hero! Writing AU's *sniff* makes me so proud. :) And this is so wonderful, I love the wording, the style, every aspect to this, I'm in love with it. 'ten minutes' 'what about guns?' Great line, to make up for the absence of 'guns, lots of guns.' But I'd like to know what happened to the Agent before he killed Trinity? Why did he decide not to kill her after all?

Yay! More twisted AUs! *bounces around happily*

Blake, I love your writing style.

"He doesn't flinch, doesn't look away from you. Perhaps he can feel the hand at the back of his neck, feel the breath on his cheek like a traitor's kiss."

*Dies*

It's beautifully written. To put it in an overpoetic manner, you took up the reigns of fate and gave them a good jerk or three, but eventually let the story settle back into what we know: That Trinity loves Neo, and Neo is the One.

""You need anything?"

"Ten minutes."

"What about guns?"

"Why?""

I love those lines. They're so Wachowski.

One nitpick (more personal opinion): Are you sure Neo's hair feels soft like feathers? (He must use a lot of Pantene Pro-V, *hl*) ^^;;

Just kidding.

Blake, my eyes just... well, never mind the gruesome anology; this is FANtastic. You have Trinity down the a T, the tense and narration is perfect, your analogies and language... *shakes head* Too gorgeous, baby. The sensory appeal was splendid and I was right smack there is that alley, bleeding. (kissing Neo would be nice too...) Amazing job. Keep it up.