Reviews for Future Hope And Trust

Cuthalion 2003-05-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseWell done. This piece filled in some gaps with some original stuff. I also liked the flashbacks and use of actual FF6 material. Some problems with transitions to and from these flashbacks, though. "I found an iron helmet and an old sword and a sprint shoes relic under loose bricks in the floor ... I said and then equipped them." This is alright, but it really stuck out to me. You shouldn't limit yourself this much to the actual game play of the RPG (mainly calling them Sprint Shoes and using the word "equipped"), especially if they're not critical (like the sword was). Some word repetition... "only," "scowled" and "icily" come to mind. They're fine to reuse, just not too many times in the same paragraph/part, especially in sentences next to each other when they can be avoided. Well done, though!
The Rushing Wind 2003-05-13 ch 1,	abuseVery good! Another chip in your pile of acheviements! ^_^
Alquamor 2003-05-12 ch 1, anon.	abuseAha! You took my advice! Much easier read, now. Still love it, of course, cuz it's the same thing as before. Whee!