Its pretty short. Instead of writing it as a story, why not make it into a poem?

Kind of creepy if you think about it. But good piece.

Short, but really touching.

Oh, wow. This is short but sweet.

*sniffle* So sad... You've really captured that moment. I'm gonna have to watch the OVA again this evening.

great...and somehow freaky, but great nonetheless.

Congrats!