This story has a nice little twist. Lina's having a major fit, and at first you think its something major. But then you find out that all she really wanted was the last of the chicken. I liked how this one-shot panned out. It was short and sweet. Nice job!

Hehehe...I thought it was rather cute myself. (^^)

Nice job for your first fanfic. A tad bit silly, but that is the Slayers realm, is it not?

There is also something about the present tense and past tense. For example, in the beginning, it says "Zelgadis decides" showing present tense, but in the same sentence it says "clung" which refers to the past tense. Just work on those and then it'll be fine and dandy.

Overall, I liked reading it. It was short and cute. Keep it up!