i really loved the story! but i wouldnt end it there. i believe there is heaps more that can be sair with out going overbored

WOOT! I spose I should say my creed on this here lil' fic:
BRILLIANT!
On ya Mel! I do enjoy your fics a lot and this one wasn't any different - Dorby, Finn - lol love the names!
I LOVE the ending line...tis always good to end at the beginning! Look forward to the next fic!

I really enjoyed the dialog in here, there was a lot of the good 'ol give-and-take from the original series and the additional couple-talk was done nicely. I also like how you focused on the blending of the family. Most 'fics I've read would've had everyone love everyone from the beginning or have some big Moment where they all learned to love each other. This was done in bits and pieces and on each character's time-frame. Lovely. ^_^

while I don't mind the story and actually enjoy it at parts, I have to say that you have Margaret portrayed as a whiney needy **, and not the strong willed person we have seen over the years. I am sorry, but she would not call Hawkeye because of this and have him come home, espcially because of a disease that is not in existance yet! If she did catch Lymes Disease then she would have died because their was no cure nor a diagnosis of the disease. I feel that you should look up your information before you write it down.
My next complaint is the names. For god sake! Why?! They are awful! Dorby?! Finn?! Kamilla?! DO you honestly think that Hawkeye and BJ would name their kids names like that? Especialy when most of them are 20th century popular and not 1950's?
And lastly, the sex scenes... horribly written. They are awful, and need to be imporved... plus, you listed this as a PG-13, when it is clearly NC-17 at parts. They were unrealistic.
Other than thoes things, I did enjoy your story... but the things you could have changed were Researching, Horrid Names/Sex Scenes, and Margaret not being such a wimp, because once again, she is not that wimpy and wouldnt need hawkeye every second...
But I did enjoy most of it :-)
Seline

Great job, it is really good

What a great ending, it's really sweet! I loved this fic Lyss, but I can hardly believe it's over!

Good story..very good story. Dorby seems to have alot of emtions.

Very good. Is that the end?

That was great...but what happened on the plane with the flight attendent? I wanna know! Anyways...good work as usual.

I enjoyed your story, however I would like to point out a few things,
1. Lymes disease wasn't named, or treated till 1977, and you have this set in the 60's. It was found in Lymes Connetticut during that year. I would have just made it a horrible flu or something if you wanted to get the same affect.
2. A few of your names are too "20th Century".
3. You need some work on grammar.

Other than that, I am enjoying the story. I just had to point out those few minor details.

*STARRY*

I enjoyed your story, however I would like to point out a few things,
1. Lymes disease wasn't named, or treated till 1977, and you have this set in the 60's. It was found in Lymes Connetticut during that year. I would have just made it a horrible flu or something if you wanted to get the same affect.
2. A few of your names are too "20th Century".
3. You need some work on grammar.

Other than that, I am enjoying the story. I just had to point out those few minor details.

*STARRY*

Promise me that you never ever plan to have children of your own. Or if you do, let someone else name them. This whole thing is like a bad romance novel. Seriously, where do you get these names? Dorby?...the hell? Kamilia Chiara? what were you THINKING?!?!?!

Well now...this was a...a different story, to say the least...NOT! I believe I've read this story before, or at least one like it...but at least that one was origonal! Only thing original about this was the names! Hawkeye would NEVER pick names like that for his kids! Not only that, but with so many kids going around I couldn't keep track of them and their freak names!! I pity any kid you ever have, they're gonna have a name like Fruitpie or something. And people in real life are NOT that MUSHY! It's like a damn soap opera! Everything is clouds and lollipops and sunshine! Life ISN'T like that! Get over it! Hawkeye isn't like that either! You have to learn how to write your story to the characters since they have already been around! You can't change characters like Hawkeye!! They were all so out of character it was a damn shame and embarassing to M*A*S*H!! Please, put away your pen and your keyboard and for the sake of hummanity, stop writing this **! And don't butter everyone up and suck up to people, acting all perfect. You're far from it.

I keep on trying to review this and it never works, so let's hope this one gets through. For starters, this story has a nice edge and is very sweet at times! But one thing I can't work out - why would anyone willingly leave Hawkeye in the first place?

WOW! Reading your story sure does beat recopying my best friends book report *puts fingers to lips* sh...teacher doesn't know we read the same book for the same reason! Heeheeheeheehee...anyways...I can't believe I haven't reviewed this story yet. Mesa sorry. This is an incredibly adorable story! Almost made me cry in some parts from it being so sweet...and I got some V-E-R-Y good mental pictures of Hawkeye from a few chapters *gets mental picture of Hawkeye in tight blue jeans and smile with evil plotting giggles* oh sorry...hehehe...I'm sorry about your Uncle Bill. It's always hard when people die...I know, I've lost more loved ones then I'd rather think about right now. But anyways...this is a great story, I love it to death, and I hope that you get everything worked out so that you can get a new chapter up soon (hopefully the next chapter Magaret can REALLY get pregnant...heh, wouldn't Hawkey freak if she ended up being pregnant with twins?!? Man that would make...*counts on fingers* Nine kids! *goes cross-eyed* Wowzers that'd be funny!). Anyhowzers...love it to death!
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