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| aethelswin 2005-05-28 ch 7,  | abuseYou have good characters and a good story. The prose could use polishing in places, but it's mostly quite readable. I suppose it's unrealistic to expect you to finish it after so much time has passed, but you stopped at a critical point. |
| me again 2005-02-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseDo you EVER update this story. |
| Grrrrrrrrr 2004-12-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseUPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE |
| Alpha-Omega 2004-12-10 ch 9, anon. | abuseAre you going to write any more? this is realy good. |
| The one who watches 2004-12-07 ch 1, anon. | abusei do believe that you should give other factions a bigger part. Like the Spartans (salutes Col. Santiago). |
| Joshua Kenni 2004-11-12 ch 8, | abuseJust a quick note to the last reviewer as I hate leaving myself reviews: For the longevity issue: I've since read the Alpha Centuari books and have learned that what you said is true. When I continue to writing this story, I plan to fix that. As for the other issues, once I get back into writing (which should be within the next couple of weeks), I'll keep those issues in mind. |
| Konatsu 2004-10-24 ch 8, anon. | abuseWonderful, Wonderful, Wonderful! As great as, if not better, than "Peaceful Revolutions". I especially love the little excerpts that you put in the beginnings, they sound so real and factual. ("Take that, Mother Goose!") By the way, would you mind adding minor characters? You could have one that stops Nathanial from contacting Deirdre/ joins with Meshka. If you would like to have some of my ideas, then email me please! I also think you should add more on the current political atmosphere, enviroments/advancements that have changed in the last 100 years, and history since then. You might also try to describe a "monitor' in detail. In the game, the leaders longevity is due to Zakharov's longevity treatments, not a gift from Planet (,unfortunately). By the way, whats your favored faction? You can answer that in email, too, if you want. Anyhow, magnificent story! |
| Desolation Angel 2004-10-05 ch 2, | abuseQuick Question, did you get blitzing from FFX? uh... yeah... also i jsut have to say wow! I read your Alpha Centuri story and I have to say you are such a talented writer. I look forward to your future updates |
| Kaji Fireson 2004-05-31 ch 6, | abuseIt seems this story is just as compelling as the first. I eagerly await any update that might happen to make its way to the Internet. |
| lunelapis 2004-05-28 ch 6, | abuseI can't wait for the continuation. Excellent work!! -lunelapis |
| Spawn Of Evil 2003-08-04 ch 6, | abuseNo Nathanial! Don't do it!! |
| Nova13 2003-06-29 ch 1, | abuseTzk.. nobody has sympathy with poor Meshka? I am dissappointed. All she wanted to do was to purify the planet from us earth born, and what does she get for it? decades of pain? kinda unfair isnt iT? lol So, yes, I like the history. But how does the world, eh, sorry, Planet look like now? All the factions knwon for trouble-shooting, Hive, belivers and spartans are still arround, all in all... |
| Feye Morgan 2003-05-31 ch 6, | abuseO, nice twist! Hm. This could become a problem, ne? Something tells me that meskha hasn't changes a bit. Excellent story! ^_^ |
| thegeeky1 2003-05-30 ch 6, | abuseWhoop whoop! Another chapter! And I FINALLY published my story ^_^ *sarcastically* Meskha's got a boyyfriend! LOL |
| das 2003-05-28 ch 5, anon. | abuseCool! But were is the Planet? I mean that voice thing... |