This is the best Jacques/Aila fic I've read so far. Everyone was in character, and they all interacted so naturally that it could have been made into an extra scene in the game. It was a perfect one-shot. I almost want to ask for a sequel, but I don't want to ruin such a good ending. Very good job.

I absolutely loved it.

Great build up with Nadir. I love how you made it seem like these people actually have no choice in the matter, and therefore, fear for their lives.

You set up the atmosphere of Budehuc Castle, showing how all these characters may interact with each other. So that reeled me in. I was happy that you mentioned characters that pretty much don't exist in fanfic(Ernie!).

Most stories just choose their couple and to hell with every thing else.

So I completely disagree with the first reviewer. I don't think it would have had such a nice effect or had been as funny. (you gave a bit of life to another neglected character, Nadir! -and only in a few paragraphs!)

Now the Aila/ Jacques interaction was golden.

I positively adored it. Their conversation just flowed. Not one word seemed out of place for them.

You had me cracking up with the one-liners, this one especially.
"If I'm not supposed to fall on my sword I don't know why you gave me one,"

I AM Disappointed in the ending! It' a ONEshot! Through out the fic I was so absorbed I had forgotten and went to the right corner for the next chapter- only to find an advertisement!

But woe is me.

And as a one shot the ending, was simply superb. Keep up the good work! (hopefully with Aila and Jacques!)

Lovely stuff! I really enjoyed the light-hearted feel to this, and your dialogue is extremely fluid.

Great work!

I like i! Keep it up!

I'm a lazy reviewer, yes I am.

Anyways...::waves the sparkly Jacques/Aila banner:: I still love the interaction between Jacques and Aila. It's not strictly romantic, but that's fine. That's better, actually; I like how they're so comfortable and relaxed around each other. And yay, you showed Jacques inviting her into the group! Because Jacques is just so darn nice like that. That part always interested me, and you handled it well.

And it's just like Ace to horribly butcher Romeo's part like that, isn't it? ^^

I like this story. It's cute, has Jacques and Aila, and very little grammar errors, if any.

To sum it up: You good writer. Me want more.

this was really well done. i was expecting aila and jacques to be casted into romeo and juliet, but you did something better. although the aforementioned concept is very nice idea, yours is better cos it fits jacques and aila's character...and not to mention, it's original. ^_^ i love jacques/aila fics...i hope you continue making them.

This is a very well written fic. I applaud you, Lirillith, and hope you'll write more in the future.

Yay for Jacques/Aila! Always great to see someone else who supports the pairing. :) I liked the fact that you didn't dive right into heavy romance with the two of them, and just left it off as being light and sweet. I've always thought that neither of them were very experienced with relationships, and if they were to pursue one, it would probably develop in a very slow and steady manner. The Ace and Queen bits were also fun. :)

On the aforementioned stuff about Borus in previous reviews, I think you handled him alright. IMO, by that point in the game, I think our Swordsman of Rage was starting to get a better grip on things, and we do know that he regretted his actions in the Karayan village. I don't think he'd want trouble with the Karayans at Budehuc, and so would just rather avoid dealing with them in situations that might cause problems (especially since it's no secret that Aila is a little hot tempered, herself).

On the whole, good job, and I hope you continue writing fics for the Suiko section. ^_~

Whee!

Actually, I think that Borus' reaction of "I don't think that's a good idea" worked fine for him. I don't think he'd get violently upset about it--he's so ashamed of what he did at Karaya that I think he would try to avoid letting anyone actually bring it up. If that makes sense.

It did seem a little slow. I guess it's probably because there's no huge Event that happens, so it doesn't really build up.

I like the way you write Jacques and Aila--they seem very comfortable around each other, and I like that. And those images of Ace playing Romeo and Geddoe as Tybalt are going to amuse me for a while. ^^;

OOh. ^^ I like it, but I'm gonna offer criticism, because, well, that is what I do best.

In the part where Aila realized Borus was playing Romeo, their reactions-- simply "This is not a good idea"-- seemed a bit calmer than I'd expect (especially of Borus.) I do like the idea of it, though, and was kind of amused by the insinuation that Aila had gone on all these Zexen knight assassination attempts. Hm... I thought, when I first started reading the story, that it would turn out to be Jacques cast as Romeo and Aila cast as Juliet. I'm glad you didn't do that, because the world doesn't need another fic like that. =P (I think maybe Konami included R&J in the list of plays specifically so fans could write it into their pairings. =P)

The beginning was a bit slow to get into... it seemed like basically a description of "the characters just being themselves," and didn't seem to be going anywhere at first, but once Aila came into the story it started to feel much more structured. Once we had some kind of idea about *what* the fic was about and the plot itself started, it was good. I mean, we don't REALLY need the Nadir setup, as we've all imagined these things happening already (amusing as they are.)

I like the end-- it was fluffy. (Well, I have trouble thinking of Jacques and Aila without the word "fluffy" popping into my brain.) Actually, it was nicely casual-- you know, not overly sweet, but just sweet enough to seem like a happy resolution.