hi! I really like this. It's excellent. But one thing could you please use punctuation at the end of sentences so it seperates what the next person says. It's easier to read that way. Thanks!

Luv,

LeftEyeLopey (NIKKI)

P.S. Write more please

I think so far its pretty intresting. Especially the SpongeBob SquarePants part. Keep up the great work.

First thing you have to do is redo how you wrote it. It's a headache. Since you are doing it script, please write it more neatly and properly.

Second thing is use more discription. A story is great if you are going for four dimensional. I'm not too excited in reading a story that's been slapped together poorly. Please keep trying and I'm sure it will get better.

I like your story but the writting is kind of clumped together maybe that is something to work on for the next chapters