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WhiteElfElder
2009-11-27 . chapter 12
You know, Remus should not have contemplated that last bit...because he garnered somebody's attention with that stupid thought. This story is interesting, but I am highly disturbed with Harry cross-dressing. I would understand if he was acting out parts of Rocky Horror Picture Show, but I do not think they are flying through space to visit Rifraff and Magenta and Frankenfurter.
Mutantkillerfrog
2009-07-20 . chapter 2
i love the way you write
Vixen Uchiha
2009-04-26 . chapter 2
what is goin to be done about padfoot
Luc
2009-04-14 . chapter 1
so, this is a crossover?
Luc
2009-04-14 . chapter 2
what's a rut?
Celestial Moonwalker
2009-03-22 . chapter 8
I'm fairly positive this story was designed with my demise in mind since the last time I laughted like this I was hauled over to our school nurse with "She'd gone barmy" as an exlanation.
And since then I'm cosidered to be without lord in my head, not necessarely a bad thing...being nornal is really something that's wee bit too late to even think about.
Pure joy. I hope I live to see the end of the story. Never contemplated dying of laughter, ya know?
Draeconin
2009-02-21 . chapter 12
Well, there's more Harry, but is the story ever going to be *about* Harry, or is he just another peripheral character to Marcia? Don't get me wrong: it's a good story. But the HP characters DO seem to be taking a back seat to your original character(s).
Draeconin
2009-02-21 . chapter 11
You lost your beta some time back, didn't you?

-With her conscious

Conscience (a frequent error)

-his father had superceded his rights

Seceded, but I think 'abdicated' would have been better.

-far more stronger

You can't get 'more stronger'. Bad grammar.

-but Dumbledore’s gave flickered over

Typo, I figure. 'Gaze'.

-high-flootin’

Highfalutin - although the word seems to come from "high-fluting, a comical indictment of people who think too highly of themselves." (Bartleby dot com)
Draeconin
2009-02-21 . chapter 8
-Marcia figured she was above such things like punctuation and capitalization.

Marcia is a fanfic author? (No offense meant, but it seems like nine out of ten [plus a fraction] can't be bothered with proper punctuation, making sure the right word is used, etc.)
Draeconin
2009-02-21 . chapter 4
-This is also for those few people who think the current storyline is dragging and Harry as a baby interested only in his toes and setting things on fire is boring.

I strongly disagree that the story is 'boring'. However, it does read more like an original story with only occasional 'guest appearances' by Hogwarts elements. If you *had* written this as an original story, I think it could be publishable (provided, of course, you introduced and developed your characters within the story, rather than in your notes [halflings]). But for people wanting to read a HP fanfic, it *is*, thus far, lacking in any meaningful Harry Potter presence.

As for this chapter... Yes, I read your notes about it, but without context, it's still rather surreal.
anonim1979
2008-10-15 . chapter 1
Great fic (as all your other ones :) ).

I'm rereading it for 3! time (nearly every time new chapter is added).

Thank You for excelent stories.
iLovePun
2008-10-15 . chapter 1
I read the summery and my face did a 'what" kind of expression. Because I read your profile (see, people DO read thos things!) and I didn't figure you to be that kind of writer...but I love the misunderstood character with rough edges so I'm going to be reading this one through...Most likely.
Merrymow
2008-09-20 . chapter 12
I was wondering when you're going to update?
crazybibliophile
2008-08-21 . chapter 12
This story's fascinating... I don't know how you came up with the plot, but it's great. Keep it up!
Chi Vayne
2008-06-24 . chapter 12
Glad to see this continued.
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