It's interesting, the interaction between Pansy and Padma. Also it was nice to see Hogwarts having racist problems. Great!

I'd love to read more about Pansy and Padma. This was fun!

EXCELLENT.
Seriously, that was incredible. You haven't just done a variation on Padma and Pansy - you've expanded them in a way that seems to fit exactly into J.K. Rowling's universe. The characters seem entirely human, unlike the way some authors try to glorify them in two-dimensional form. They're real, and they have their faults and their good points. And the plot ... It's very unusual in its concepts, but somehow it just seemed like it actually _could_ happen (ok, possibly not in the perfect Potter universe, but a very good try!). The Padma/Pansy tension was very well done, too - a nice touch.
ari

Heh. I love the whole "Ravenclaw - Slytherin" alliance. Actually, i think it's quite plausible. The other houses are O.K... Ginny is actually my favorite character, but that doesn't mean I have to be in love with her house, lol. I am a die hard D/G fan though. It's a great story. Keep up the good work!!

cool, keep writing.

I like your story a lot! I love the friendship between Pansy and Padma.

Clean and Innocent? You? I'Faith, you wouldn't know where to _start_! But as you know, I’ve got more than a soft spot for naughty schoolgirls, and you do it _too_ well. One wonders what you got up to in your schooldays – but I think we can all guess.

Anyway, whatever other "reviewers" have said, I agree with you - I think it IS quite likely that there is racism (of the actual racial nature, not just the Mudblood thing) at Hogwarts. I've always seen the pureblood/mudblood thing as having a distinctly classist air about it. Old families against the not-so-old families, for starters. And the racism is entirely plausible - especially as the two culprits in question are of Muggle origin. Going to Hogwarts doesn't erase the prejudices a person had before then - whether or not purebloods hold racial prejudice isn't even the issue. A lot of Muggles do, and so do their children. It’s entirely in keeping with JKR’s “you learn from your parents” spiel.

I also like what you've done with two minor characters - we have evidence from canon that Pansy knows Parvati (evidence which could also imply that they knew each other _out_ of Hogwarts at some point) so it's quite credible that she'd also know Padma. The Gryffindor/Slytherin tension just wouldn't matter, Padma being in Ravenclaw after all, so it's likelier still that the two girls would have a better relationship than Pansy/Parvati. (A _much_ better relationship indeed. Pervert!) And, furthermore, it makes _sense_ for Pansy to rescue Padma. The pureblood issue, the fact that they were childhood friends - loyalty to the blood if nothing else provides a very Slytherin motive for Pansy's actions. That, and the fact that she fancies her. That's quite important too. Oh, and I also like the Ravenclaw/Slytherin dynamic. Ravenclaw House seems a lot less _aggressive_ in canon than Gryffindor - which probably helps relationships with Slytherin House. (Delightful messaging between the absent Marcus and the absent Roger, by the way!)There's a lot less competitiveness, and perhaps a lot more acceptance. The following quote sums it up beautifully.

"Pansy didn't understand what it meant to be a Ravenclaw, and Padma didn't know what it was like to be a Slytherin. Still, the brunette didn't expect her to."

And then you have to go and top it off with your own brand of humour. "Number three on the Best Places to ** list" - honestly. Quite, quite disgusting. But Ha-worthy all the same. Hurrah for Shannon Boyd too - I like to see her popping up whenever possible.

OOh! Padma! She's my favourite character!

I liked this a lot and it is a change of pace from your previous works, which shows variety and that is a good thing, shows versatility. I really like Padma and Pansy's interactions and the colorful dialogue. This was a wonderful read and can't wait to read more.

To Impailed:
There's probably a tactful way to put this, but I'm not sure if you could understand me if I used it. So I'll be simple: You're a moron.

Faith is one of my oldest and dearest net friends. I've cowritten with her and have always valued her opinions. I just found out about her HP fic tonight and even though I don't think I'd write my stories this dark (STOP LAUGHING, FAITH!), I love them. They're beautiful, poetic, amazing, dark. Most importantly, it opens your mind to other possiblities and portrayals. I'd NEVER considered Ginny dark, but I like how Faith wrote it. I've never particularly cared for Pansy, and while one story isn't going to completely change my mind, I am willing to give her the benefit of the doubt now.

Now, as for YOUR review: First, learn to use the caps lock key. Intelligent people use puncuation and capitalization. Teeny-boppers with should have NetNanny software don't. As for spelling... Let's count the words you butchered: that (although it was a spacing error), can't, handle, isn't (of course, you could just be too lazy to use proper puncation), it's (although, that's more of a grammatical error), portrayed, don't, punctuation (you could have sounded this one out!), swear, controversy (I honestly had to consider whether or not you had misused a word there). Ten. You misspelled TEN words.

Now, as for the CONTENT of your message. Oh, and since I'm quoting and you're probably stupid, when I put [sic] after a word, it means that that's a direct quote of something you misspelled. Got it? Good.


So was your entire review. And yet, I feel I've gained nothing by decoding it.


You criticize Faith for using profanity, and yet you have no problem with implying profanity? Please explain that double standard to me.


That's one way of looking at it and it's a very popular way. However, that doesn't mean that a writer can't find a redeeming trait in an "evil" character and write a story based on it.

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It's very nice of you to share what you learned when you looked up evil today, but I'm sure Faith already knew that. Seeing how she has a bit of evil to her.

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"Meant to be mean to her surroundings?" What does that mean? Is she verbally abusive to chairs? Does she kick tables? Or is she just a slob and makes her prettily decorated room look bad by leaving clothes lying around? I know my mother would think that was evil.


Actually, I think Faith left a lot of her more base traits in tact. She called one of Pamda's tormentors a MudBlood. She possibly took advantage of her friend's trust to learn the Ravenclaw password. Faith hardly violated her character. She just expanded on it.


No, Pansy wasn't "walking around" and sticking up for people in different houses. I honestly see Hermione, Harry and Ron as much more likely to patrol for evildoers. Pansy found someone tormenting a friend and she retaliated. Possibly in a questionable way.

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Okay, I'm going to take a cannon issue with you here. The Sorting Hat considered placing Harry in Slytherin because he was ambitious. Slytherins are NOT evil. Hogwarts wouldn't take all the "evil" students and put them together in a house with an evil ghost and an evil professor. They're simply ambitious. Moreover, as shown in OOtP, the Slytherin house values pure lineage.


Padma is INDIAN. Not black.

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A lot of people can't get over it. Are you suggesting we jail everyone who shows racism?


You didn't need to add always there.

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I've never seen anything to indicate that Rowling included Mudblood racism in place of regular racism. How many non-Cacausian students do you see at Hogwarts? Do we know for a fact, from her books, that Padma never encountered a racist remark? Padma and her sister are minor characters. Moreover, I don't think that including color racism in her books would further the plot. Just because an author omits something does not mean that she's removing it from her universe.


She didn't develop it. My understanding is that it's been around for a very long time.


Well, if that isn't the frying pan calling the kettle blue (Inside joke). All joking aside, what do you reccommend? Should she avoid those pesky puncuation problems by just not using the stuff? That seems to be your strategy.


Belive me, those were not all the swear words that girl knows.


Are you saying that no one should ever write a contreversial book? And contreversy tends to raise interest, not decrease sales. Oh, and it should have been fewer people, not less.

You're making the (highly insulting) assumption that anyone who writes and post fic is an aspiring writer who just can't make it. That's not true. I know several people who could easily succeed as professional writers, but have chosen to pursue other careers (lawyer, history professor, filmmaker). These people write as a creative outlet and any feedback they get is just icing on the cake. Faith is one of these people. Don't assume that everyone who posts on ffnet is an aspiring writer who lacks the talent, skills and/or imagination to succeed in the "real world."


What the heck does that mean?


I know you meant that to be terribly insulting to her, but I'm sure she got a good laugh from that. I mean, you, who can't even write a proper review, wishing her luck? And telling her she needs it? It's ludicrious!

As for you, I hope you've learned that you should have something worthwhile to say before you post a review.

Ahh, don't feel odd about writing something of this nature. It's delicate business. I love the Ravenclaw prefect. Sounds dead sexy in that Remus Lupin sort of way.

To Impailed – before you go flaming one of the only good writers on this site, use spell check, a thesaurus, and common sense. I’m disgusted that you would preach to Faith about things you haven’t even done in one measly review.

Essentially, in fanfiction it is the right of the author to create what they will; Faith keeps JK’s characters in canon while exploring the possibilities between Padma and Pansy. Your 2D view of Pansy only shows that you’ve no right to tell people who are smarter than you that they’ve no talent.

I’ve yet to read any of your work and after reading this piece of ** review I’ll never read what you’ve written; Faith has more talent in her pinkie finger than you do in the entirety of your revolting mind.

Go ** off and leave the good writers alone.

that was bloody confusing in some places

WHAT THE F#*K

pansy is a slytherin she is evil and tha t means not nice if your tiny little brain cant haddle it. Pansy is meant to be mean to her surroundings unlike you have portrade her, she isnt the person that would walk around and stick up for someone in a different house its not slytherin like and if the wizarding world cant get over that someone is black then they should have stuck them all in Azkaban. There is always a reason why Rowling developed something the "Mudblood" racism is enough in the wizarding world and you dont need to develop "Colour" racism as well.

Watch some puncution and watch the language if you want to become a world famous writer you will need to watch the vocabulary not everybody wants to know all the sware words that you know, it produces more contrivercy and less people will read your next book.

okay "Paki **"

Better luck next time you'll need it.

Racism? I've never thought about racism as we know it in the wizarding world, and I think I like it that way ... You see, I think JK Rowling meant for the wizarding world to be totally separate from mundane issues such as skin color. I think that is why she invented the debate between purebloods and "mudbloods" - to include a prejudice that will show that her characters are still human, while ensuring the intrigue of the wizarding world that branches from it's difference from everyday life. But that's just my take. The story itself was excellent and quite interesting. And Shannon Boyd was very well done. Bravo!

~Angie

I enjoyed that. Padma doesn't get an awful lot of attention normally, but I like what you've done with her. What with the mudblood/pureblood thing it never occurred to me that you'd get something as mundane as racism there. Then again, would "mudblood" count as racism? Probably wouldn't actually. Or would it?

Hm.

Sod it, don't know. In any case, I enjoyed that chapter and look forward to the next one!
Oh, I like Shannon Boyd, by the way. Not a typical pain-in-the-arse OC. Very good!

Bobbi