"Yes, Mr. Greengrass, turned to ash."

it's actually daphne greengrass, a girl. just pointing that out.

again with the marietta snitch...

i've noticed you like to emphasize age a lot. the (much) older Dumbledore, or the (much) younger wizard, etc. you should try a little diversity. use different words or express what you wanna say in a different way.

...marietta snitch? either you really don't know what you're doing or you actually think that's her name.

lots of things that i have problems with in the story in general, like why you bold some words randomly. for example, the list of DA people, harry+friends are bolded, as well as cho chang. i don't understand that.

also, you put names in quotes sometimes for no reason. like... 'tom' the bartender quickly rushed out of the back room to serve 'Violet' her drink. this was in a previous chapter

another thing that bothers me is how you include elvish in your story. it's nice that you bothered to research, but it's just annoying to read. all you have to do to display the convos between harry and violet is {good evening, I am fine}, etc.

Get rid of the Elvin language. When they're talking alone, we assume it isn't English anyway and it's annoying reading it AND the translation. It's the only thing making me lose interest in this story.

you are an amazing writer, it was like I could see just what was happening in my minds eye.

will harry and violet be a couple?

will there be any hp magic?

wow great prologue. very clutching. i couldn't stop reading. I can wait to read chapter 1

Nice chapter! Ima gonna go to that Elvish Name Generator site to see what my name would be! :D

I like this very much!

i don't think you should reright the story as i loved it anyway. it was a really good fig well thought out and good char detail. languagge and spells were translated wich you don't normally get. can't wait to reading more of your books

Very nice translation. Must be annoying.

Damn. I got bad chills and was sure this was discontinued. The pace was so damn slow and the plot just didn't seem interesting enough although the idea behind it was.
But the story was marked as completed and there was no mention of hiatus or abandoned in the summary and so I ploughed on.

I would've apprectiated both the story not marked complete as it isn't and some fore warning in the summary itself.

Hope you consider that seeing someone had to point it out that you should put up a chapter with only a notice of not working on this anymore.

I really hoped there would've been more story in middle earth. It was all rushed over so quickly. No one there, not even galadriel, really was given a chance to feel like family to Harry.

It wasn't shown how his first days or weeks went by. Or nothing of his travels and I really would've liked that. I understand you apparentely wanted the plot to get back but I'm feeling it would've been better if you didn't show the middle earth at all but just return Harry straight to his rooms.

This will obviously be Violet/Harry which is a damn shame cause I really like Legolas /Harry. I'm not really feeling this violet person at all and somewhat dislike oc's.

All respect for doing so much work over the elvish language but this would be far more easier to read if it was all in english and elvish was in cursive or something.