Oh, my god. It's finally happened. Someone wrote about Daisuke and Takeru differently. I applaud you! This is the first one I've read, and I've always wondered about the possibilities, and you pulled it off quite well.

Well...i guess it was okay...

i liked the rhyming...um

Very sweet and emotional! Great job!

Beautiful! It sounds like something Takeru would be thinking...

Wow! Beautiful poem, Aa-chan. Very nice rhythm and pattern of rhyming (I can never get mine to rhyme :P) - I especially loved the rhyme in the last verse, for no particular reason. Gorgeous, simply gorgeous. **