1.“Are you awake? Its time for breakfast.”
Correction: It’s time

2.“You’re field trip is today, right?”
Wrong: You are field trip is today
Correction: Your field trip

3.“Where was it too again?”
C: Where was it to again?

4.“Not really. Just getting my stuff, so how you’re doing?”
Wrong: so how you are doing?
C: So how’re you doing?

5.“I knew I could on you.
C: could count on you

6.Sometimes, cancer just strikes, its already in the advanced stages, we caught it too late.”
C: it’s already in the advanced

7.“As he shown such an increase?”
C: Has he shown

8.“You’re grades, you got your report card, right?”
Wrong: You are grades, you got your report card, right?
C: Your grades. You got your report card, right?


Other than those typos and plenty of punctuation misuse, this is a good first chapter.

Bravo, a fantastic and epic retake on Spider-Man's life. I loved mostly every part of it. If I'm right, Mysterio is the only surviving villain!

I am quite astounded at this being quite possibly one of the greatest Spider Man stories of our time. You have taken a Marvel legend and created your very own world and story around him, making it both believable and enjoyable. Your graphic and dark approach to the Spiderman mythos was very enjoyable and a pleasure to read and I can only hope you do this well in all your writings. I must say your take on the symbiote and Venom was one of my favorite portions of the story. You did very well with the subject and I truly enjoyed the dream fight sequence as well. Kudos to you, my friend, kudos!

Aww! The ending was so sweet! I really love this story! The only thing that I really didn't like was when Fury died. And it seemed like after every arc, you just sort of...killed them off. Ya know? But either way this is really good! :D

man this is so cool!!

Great fic Hammer. You should get made into a comic book or some other of distribution. Its really that amazing.

I'll looking forward to reading more of your fics.

I read this story quite a while ago. I can remember adding this thing to my favorites and checking literally everyday for an update. There was a chapter or two that I felt were dragging a little, but those were very few and far between. This is, without a doubt, the single best story I've ever read on this website, or any website like it. It's better than anything I've ever read from USM, and it's better than anything I've seen in the movies. If this story is anything to go by, you're an extremely talented writer. Excellent job.

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