Wow!It is a great story,although you are right that this is absoloutly not what really happened in the hoenn sereis,Still it was the most exiting story.

The story has tottaly caugth my attion, it brings great intrest to people like me.But out of line, what happened to Brock and Max, were'nt they all traveling toghter...
Oh forget it it's your story you make it your own way.

Make the next chapter good like the other ones.

GOOD LUCK!

U totally hav 2 update asap plz!!

I'm love Ash and May fanfiction

It is awsome! finish it! Or im going to die!

it wass pretty iteresting but too short. i mean you got the deep plot down now you got to finishes

I think you should write more about Ash and May romance.I think this because because this story is only a little about them.

cmon make chapter 5 already you said chapter 5 is on the way but so far I haven't seen anything.So please make my wish of reading chapter 5 come true

please finish this fic it's one of the best I,ve seen and I want to see what Ash is going to do next.Also what May's going to do while Giovanni's controling her

please finish,this fic is really great,and I want to know how it ends.

With May being hypnotised,and used as bait to get Ash to Join,and bring power to Team Rocket will definetly make the story alot better.But I was also thinking maybe Ash would decide to join Team Rocket if Giovanni would promise to reverse the hypnosis and let May go.

Oh! Please FIN!

Hi its me Keilah.Anyway cool story.But you haven't updated it in 3 years and I'm want see what happens next.PLEASE CAN YOU KEEP ON GOING!*puppy dog eyes and begging on knees* please...Everybody wants you to keep on going.I relly liked it.LOVED IT.May is hypnotized.LOL.Can't wait to see the next chapter.Poor Ash.*still puppy dog eyes and begging on knees*

you rock - see ya - Kitty Kat

WIRED ENDING BUT PLEASE FINISH

wow such suspence please finish it i want to know what happens to may & ash?