Woohoo! I loved this chapter! XD
Reading from Omi’s point of view was a nice change, and although it took you a while to finish it (and a while for myself to find time to read it), it was worth waiting for it.
It’s very easy to identify with Omi – which is of course half of the fun. I’m sure everyone feels the same when getting up on Monday, rushing to school and then trying to survive the rest of the week. And then you suddenly get a foreign girl sitting next to you, a rather beautiful one as well (at least from the outside ^_^) and from that moment on, your whole life changes. I loved that! *laughs*
And, man, I feel sorry for Omi for having such a teacher. OO I guess every school has them, teachers with boring speeches, trying to catch you at even the slightest hint of dozing off. His methods to calm down the class reminds me strongly of some teachers we’ve had as well. Although you’re very unlucky when you sit next to the teacher, it does work. OO
Yohji and Ken were fun in this chapter. XD Typically something for them to first think Emily is Omi’s girlfriend and then come with all kinds of useless advises when Omi gets ready for a date. And Omi’s remark to Aya about that Emily knows how to smile (indicating that Aya doesn’t know) was very risky. I’m surprised Aya actually let the boy stay alive. Well, I guess he can’t possible kill Omi without getting Persia angry. ^_^
All in all, I think this was a rather good chapter. You said something about feeling unhappy with some of the conversations, but I couldn’t really find them. Oh, I probably will, when you’ve changed them, but at the moment, everything seems to be alright to me.
Well, it’s not the longest review from me, I guess, but then again, it’s nearly 9:00am and I’m still have asleep. The story managed to wake me up. At least partially. ^_^
Up to chapter five! XD (things are getting really interesting now, so hurry up, please ^_^)
Lenihan

Aww, Aya-kun seems to sense the Crawford in Emily ^^; though really, I can't picture Aya being enthusiastic about *anyone* except his sister walking in or something. He's just grumpy. I liked this chapter, with Emily creating a place for herself in Omi's class. Her interaction with people is interesting to read too ; she has a quite unique way to handle people, ne? A sweet, fun chapter to read. I find grumpy Aya oddly endearing for some reason (^^;) and of course Omi's cute as well. :)

This chapter was a lot of fun to read, even if the Crawford-insulting-Schuschu-part made me sad rather than cheerful. I don't know ; perhaps you succeeded too well in making Crawford as ruthless and efficient in using words as weapons as in most other things he does. ^_;

Right. Here's your review because you asked so 'nicely' :P

Well I'm not gonna go into in-character-ness because I do not have a clue.

So first off, I have to second Lenihan's 'Go Schu-chan!' XD And 'poor schu-chan', too. OO

Um... lessee.
Emily is cool, even though... Omi. ~shudder~ Think she's a lot less cute and childish than she's showing.

The changes in POV's are also good, for variation and things... and for fun. ^_^
Crawford insulting Schuldich is fun, and well written. These kind of subliminal insults work better than just calling someone an **, anyway.

So there is your review. Maybe not the longest one ever written, but hey ^_^;;

Whee! Chapter Three! ^_^ And from Schu’s POV! Arigatou! *hugs* It’s so funny to read it through the telepath’s POV. Don’t know why. He’s just humourous. And he has a way with words. Like “Shop owners, how I love thee and thine Japanese…” and the way he invents knew words to call Bradley. “Dear devilish leader” sounds very great (and very insulting as well ^_^).

Okay, just a little bit about the characters (since you wondered if you had kept dear Bradley in character during his cascade of insults towards Schu), I think you left him in character. I guess letting Crawford insult someone is hard, since the guy would never insult them in a direct way (if you know what I mean). But this was more or less how Crawford would do it; implying on things the other would’ve done or would be. Great job, I loved that part!! Of course, I felt sorry for Schu, but then again, he shouldn’t have looked at Emily.

I wonder why Nagi doesn’t want Emily being a member of Schwarz. I think because Schuldich has to stay in his room while Em is with them. But still… Oh, I guess we get to know it one day, right? If not, I’m gonna bug you until you tell me. So there… :P

Umm… Can’t think of something else. The first part of this chapter was the funniest, with Schuldich testing Bradley’s patience. ^_^ Go Schu-chan! Ahem… Never mind that…

Well, good luck with writing and I know I have to patient right now before the next chapter comes up. You also have other stories to right. Still… HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER!

~Soulfire~

PS. Is it me or are my reviews getting longer every time? OO

Hmm… Interesting… Bradley and shopping. ^_^ It was a great chapter, really funny, though, if you’re really interested, the first chapter was funnier. But that’s my own opinion.

I think it would’ve been interesting to see this part from Schu’s POV as well, but I’ll admit that would be impossible, since Bradley goes shopping with Em and not him. Then you would’ve had him stalking those two, and I don’t think that would be a great succes. But then you could’ve written what Brad thinks of his dear sister through Schu’s POV.

On the other hand, I think this is the best way. ^_^ Now we all know Bradley simply *adores* his sister.

Well, I leave the “keeping in character” alone, since you do that perfetly. I will tell you when I read something I simply don’t agree with. But I don’t think that’ll happen. So don’t worry. ;)

An interesting idea, by the way, of Crawford. Em being a member of Schwarz… Don’t think Schu will like that, since he’s forced to stay with Nagi, but it would be really fun to see that happening.

Well… I think I’ve just about covered everything I wanted to say… If something comes up in my mind, I’ll write it in the next review. Hope you had a chance to continue writing on the third chapter while you were on holiday.

Good luck with writing!

~Soulfire~

Wow! Nice! Who are you gonna pair up with emily? Hope it'll be Aya hehe... Please continue!

Oh, precognition can be such a bother sometimes, ne Crawford? *grins widely* That was a lot of fun ; even if Crawford says he and Emily lack the bond of, say, Aya-chan and Aya, I still think he's a bit of a softie when it concerns her. (And he's so cute that way!). It figures Emily would like the Weiss guys better than Schwarz, I mean ... *reconsiders* Hmm, well maybe not. But who could ever match Omi? *fondly glomps imaginative Omi-plushie and presses 'Submit'*

hey, this is pretty good.. a real good idea... and the thought of Crawford's sister falling for one of weiss... oh, love the idea! definitely will be checking for updates to this when you get them up!

Nice job!! Please continue!! I would really like to know what will happen next. ^^

Very good story, nicely written. I like the way you used Schuldich’s point of view to describe the story. It’s very easy to identify with him, which makes it easier to read the story.

And Crawford embracing someone… I can imagine Schuldich simply had to laugh. I know Em is just his sister, but still… We’re talking about an iceberg. Nice idea, though. Would give all I had to see "him" embracing someone.

I think you did a great job in keeping everyone more or less in character. Of course, there was no sign yet of Nagi and Farfarello, but I’d say Schuldich is just as annoying as he’s supposed to be and Crawford is still the cold arrogant bussinessman. I can forgive his little affection with Emily. I can tell from the story it has been a while since they have seen each other and Crawford is not suddenly all sweet and loving at once. He just allows more from Emily then from others. That’s quite normal. Even dear Bradley is still human. (I hope...)

Schu’s not being very intelligent at moment, which makes it only the more fun. And since this is perhaps going to be also a romance fic, perhaps a nice relation between Em and Schu? You might want to consider it.

Well, let’s finish this review by simply asking you to continue. It’s a good story and I’d simply "love" to read more chapters. Till chapter two, okay?

~Soulfire~

I'm loving this so far keep it up sis you have loads of talent!

Hehe, poor Schuldich! Interesting to see Crawford so emotional in front of a relative ; it's hardly a wonder Schu's a bit freaked out by this new attitude of Crawford's. Curious to see this plot develop.