This was a great story! I would really love it if you did another chapter!

that is so awesome

WHATS TAKING SO LONG TO UPDATE?

KEEP GOING OR I SHALL SEND...BARNEY! HE WILL SING UNTIL YOU FINISH!(DUNDUNDUN!)

wow. thats all i can say. that story was great!the characters were very well devoloped, and it was easy and enjoyable to read.i really hope you keep writing, and come out with another part.i'll most definately be here to read it when you do. keep it up!

*Britt-Britt*

This is a very good story- it has a good plot. But, I think you need to work on your technique a bit. The story (in my opinion)doesn't exactly flow together and it makes it hard to read. Start new paragraphs whenever someone else speaks don't just put them in one paragraph. It's a great story but it needs tweeking! plz rewrite cuz I'd love to read your finished/rewritten story!

It was superb, but it ended too quickly! Can you modify it, please? The end was what I was waiting for! :)

Okee... really fast, and confusing... but still, love the story line!

your ending was too abrupt you ned more ending detail...

more more more

this chapter is alot easier to read! good job! but i *do* think 10 is a little young to kiss and fall in love, etc. but, hey, maybe that's just me. other wise, good story, hope you come out with the next chapter soon.

it is a really good plot and with a great beginning but the dialogue is really hard to read. i don't know if it's just the way it uploads on your computer, but there are no tabs or seperate lines for the speaking parts, which makes it hard to read. this deffinately wasn't a flamer, tho! very godd story, and i'm off to read the next chapter! :D

I love the plot...it's very good. But as for descriptives and emotions, i don't like it very much. I think it went to quickly, and u made the story go to fast. Certainly when she fell in love w/ Brian, that was just too quick quick, no emotion, no nothing! U feel more then that when you fall in love. But I did enjoy it, it was good reading and I look forward to more chapters! please read and review my stories, :), i would appreciate it!

rose

writing blease cuz im dead curious about what happens next!

patipati22

p.s. butterbeer is 1 word

kool story! it's sorta weird though how after mogan found our that sirius was going to azkaban she fell asleep. it's acutally sorta funny that she did though. if you could fix up the ending a little, maybe put in some detail about what happened when she and harry met, then it would be a great story! good job!